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Eternity

I want to walk where eagles fly
And icy rills make play
Relax beneath resplendent sky
Where herdwick sheep make play
Much more aware
In mountain air
That loving you
Is what I'll do
Forever

A contest entry

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  • Pamela A Lamppa gold member
    July 3

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    I feel Susan in this. Much more aware in mountain air. I loved the smooth rhyme in this piece with the hard hitter at the end.

    Very nicely done. Thank you for your entry. ~Pamela


  • Gwenevere
    July 3
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    I have not tasted mountain air but your poem makes me want to.A lovely love poem, Ros


  • Cynewulf silver member
    July 3

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    I like this, it is succinct & says what it is. For some reason it reminds me of Wordsworth, don't know why though. Good contest entry.

  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 3

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    Will y ou love me forever???

    I love you this was well said been waiting rto see what you'd write

    Passions