you say goodbye; I cannot hear you.
The buzzing in my ears is too strong.
This alcohol induced state
creates a bubble around me,
and I have nowhere to run.
[only the bottom of the bottle can save me]
Your words, like a bee sting
Hurt for a minute,
But eventually it’ll stop
However, the sting of you leaving
Will never disappear.
[painful regrets and memories hurt more]
Jealousy spins me on her merry-go-round
Moving faster, faster
If I jump now I’ll break
So I stay put and shut my eyes,
When I’m open again the ride of hell stops
I jump off and run far away
Never to return again.
[if I leave now I leave you forever]
Driving fast before I crash
Headlights appear in every direction
Probably someone’s being chased
Oh wait, that’s me
and you’re my captor.
[there’s nowhere to run now]
Doing my time in your heart
I’m stuck and cannot escape
Waves of terror crash down over me
This beating jungle of veins surrounds me
I can only escape once it stops beating.
[But that means I have to kill you]
Living in the fast lane
On the fast track
Adrenaline pumps through my body
As highway horrors surround me
I become entwined within them.
[time will never stop]
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A contest entry
- That's right, 50 titles! by WiltedRose0777.
470 points, ended July 4, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
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475 points, ended September 7, 2008, 62 entries
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Thank you very much for being patient with me, and entering my contest.
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-Jealousy spins me on her merry-go-round
Moving faster, faster
If I jump now I’ll break
So I stay put and shut my eyes,
When I’m open again the ride of hell stops
I jump off and run far away
Never to return again.
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Damn. Talk about my kind-of current dilemma. You penned that perfectly. Wow, dear. Wow. haha, I can't even begin to describe how amazing that is. How you structured it was just incredible. I love the whole merry-go-round metaphoric phrase. Wonderfully penned, dear :] I loveeee this. Thank you so much for entering & best of luck to youuu! ♥ -
not really dirty pretty, close though
kind of cliche
i liked this though;
[if I leave now I leave you forever] -
Wow...I really like the way you wrote this. Good job and thank you for entering
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You're right you really never stop loving that person
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Powerful... What a very powerful poem you have here. This is what I was hoping I'd see come from this title. I enjoyed reading this so much, partly because this reminds me of a painful ordeal a friend of mine is going through and also the words and style you chose. The line that stuck out to me the most was this...
-Doing my time in your heart-
It just struck me. I love this poem. I think I'll have to re-read this a few more times until I get the full effect of what you have written, but until then, excellent job. -
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wow thanks for the silver!
i'm glad you enjoyed it
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wow.
[there’s no where to run now] --> nowhere
but other than that, this is amazing!
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