Ire's logs burning eyes,
rage's smoke blurs truth.
Lips flame
towards villains,
blind any innocence,
Charcoal consequences
of blind vengeance
bitter taste to mind's saliva.
Author notes
25 words
Vengeance is ashes in my mouth...Amai Kanashimi
A contest entry
- Quickie...8/25....Prompt is UP!!!! by Sweet Sorrow.
425 points, ended July 3, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i like how you worded this... and of course the metaphorical words you use are always stellar... congrats on the bronze.
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Charcoal consequences
of blind vengeance
bitter taste to mind's saliva.
Excellent methapor! Had read this lines thrice giving me thoughts to ponder. Excellent!
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a wonderful take on the promt
Charcoal consequences of blind vengeance bitter taste to mind's saliva.good luck in the contest
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WOW! My Brother,
What a take on the prompt! This is amazing! Kinda leaves a bitter taste in the mouth if one thinks on it too long!
Great job!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Nicely done with your ususal aplomb... Lovely images in meaninful words...
Ken
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Excellent~
A Magnificent take on the prompt and Love the reference to rage's smoke blurs truth
Wonderful weaving of words Precious
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweetness
Best wishes too
and my Love & Light
~ Desire~*~
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This is just wonderful dear brother..
I love the way you pen a great poem here.
Riftkin
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