Bitter taste lays
on tainted tongue,
no longer able to
enjoy sweet pleasures
which once lingered
in my heart
~only forgiveness canwash it clean.
Author notes
Vengeance is ashes in my mouth...Amai Kanashimi
A contest entry
- Quickie...8/25....Prompt is UP!!!! by Amai Kanashimi.
425 points, ended July 3, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I know that taste!! And forgiveness is such a hard thing to give... yet can be freeing! As always, beautifully done sis! Congrats on the silver!
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Once tasted many opt to revel in the bitter formula of the taste the dwell upon, while others find the strength and will to wash clean of the vile taint which coats.
Wonderfully expressed in powerful imagery and metaphor. Congratulations on the silver sweetheart.
Love,
Mouser
xoxoxoxox
Sun and stars shine no brighter than you!
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~only forgiveness can
wash it clean..
Very powerful lines, where emotions fully expressed. Excellent!
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which once lingered in my heart only forgiveness can
wash it clean..wow a wonderful poem full deep emotions we must all try and learn the word forgiveness although we can never forget any hurt from our heart wonderful good luck in the contest
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WONDERFUL!!!!
Oh so true! Forgiving is the best path to contentment and peace, but not always easily come by.
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perfect for the prompt...
this really made my heart hurt.
forgiveness cleanses the palate, so the sweetness of love may be tasted again.
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Nicely done, vengeance is nt what it is cracked up to be. Beft of luck in the contest.
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Lovely take and beautifully penned... Good luck in the contest...
Ken
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