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A Moment Of Wishes

As a falling star sprinkles magic dust on your cold winter cheek.
You make wishes of your journey to soon be over.
When the moon disappears and you witness the sun,

Your day turns around to summer love.

You run in the beach,swim in the ocean making this time a moment of wishes.

 

 

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Hey its Longlife,I am a 10 year old girl.

A contest entry

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  • Autumn Whisper
    September 2, 2008
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    Wonderful imagery created for someone so young - well done on this piece longlife - I really enjoyed this poem. I can just picture than moon fading and sun rising - a glorious image in anyone's eyes. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
    best wishes as always
    Autumn Whisper

  • Broken-Bones
    August 19, 2008

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    The last line was so lovely, it really made me smile and gave me some very cute images. This really does suit the contest as it cheered me up. Beautiful Work, Well done x


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    July 7, 2008

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    "You run in the beach,swim in the ocean making this time a moment of wishes"

    Naww what a cute write ^^
    I like what you've done with this, it's beautiful

    Good luck with your entry
    Claire x


  • whiterabbit.
    July 4, 2008

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    aw, I really like this a lot. It's so cute and hopeful. I love the way you've written it. The descriptions and imagery are wonderful. Keep it up.