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My Feel

You are my life , you are my choice,
Once you come near me ,I want to get you closer.
When you go far away , I still want you to get closer.
Your presence around me is just like the fresh air across the lea.
When you look at me I feel shy ,
And I don't know the answer to this why???
You are my man this is what I feel ,
But I don't know what are your feelings to these.
You seem to be very caring ,
But at times rude, sometimes annoying and sometimes cute.
You are my Adam and I want to become your Eve,
But when will you understand the depth of my feelings?
Your smile is a reason for me to celebrate,
If you would really feel the same that I feel,
Then it wont be a dream instead it would be a dream come true,
Please try to understand that I LOVE YOU!
-Ankita Ashesh

Author notes

This poem is for the guy wid whom I ll fall head over heels in love with !!!
so my MR." X " whoever you are , wherever you are .... this one s for YOU only for YOU ...ENJOY !
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  • Titus gold member
    May 13

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    awww, I try to put this into context with the moment, and feel as awful as you do, please believe me, you have those thoughts and anxities at heart, to expel them quickly, Take care. Tony.


  • historygeek6190
    April 21
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    good job


  • tears.of.silence
    April 5

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    This is quiet sweet. I liked how you wrote this. It seems to be your wish. Your third poem has given you 15 points so you have a total of 50 points in this contest thus far. Thank you for entering and the best of luck to you. Kahy


  • Trill - Trickle
    January 20

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    Superb poem!

    THanks for your entery! Good write and I particularly enjoyed the line.......
    You are my Adam and I want to become your Eve,
    But when will you understand the depth of my feelings?
    GREATJOB~
    Keep it up!
    ~ trill


  • sunflowerpoet
    January 16
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    "You are my Adam and I want to become your Eve," I loved this line! Certainly a delightful read. Especially considering you wrote it purely from imagination and not with someone in your mind, I think this is a great job. I loved the theme, after all there is nothing like love! Congrats on your bronze trophy too.

    ~Sunflower.


  • Storm-Goddess
    November 15, 2008

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    nice job

    very nice
    it certainly fits this poem , and you may feel that you put alot of you feeling in it but some how i felt like i was standing at the outside of a window trying to look in . but it is nice good luck


  • DawnKestrel
    November 4, 2008

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    This is good, but you could change 'u' into 'you'. Other than that, bravo.
    And good luck in my contest.

    • TransparentOpacity
      November 5, 2008
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      Oh thanks for telling me this ...I didnt notice this before ... but I have made the corrections .

      Thank you !!


  • floofy
    October 21, 2008
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    "You are my Adam and I want to become your Eve"

    Awwwwwwww


  • Hannie
    October 8, 2008
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    awesome poem...had such a depp meaning to it...a joy to read

    GOod luck


  • offlimits
    September 30, 2008
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    very beautiful i love it well done
    good luck


  • Tercil gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Very beautiful enchantment of the woo, sensational exclamations which bring about miracles and understanding concerning love. Lovely abstract feel which makes the whole element spell binding.


  • kyrkx
    September 12, 2008

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    this is very touching.. every lines are full of emotions..thank you for your entry.. you followed all the rules i've written and indeed you made an entry that touches my heart.. keep it up...

    • TransparentOpacity
      September 13, 2008
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      THANX!!

      thanx kyrks .....m glad u liked my poem ......thank you chooo much for the comments......m very happy to hear from you that my poem touched ur heart ....THANX AGAIN !!!!


  • nevadapoet
    September 12, 2008
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    a beautiful write...well done


  • Lsh-x
    August 11, 2008

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    You've written about love, such a beautiful topic. And you've captured the confusement, the pain everything love may bring.

    Remember to to make your I's capitals.

    Well done, and good luck x


  • lostangel07
    August 8, 2008

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    One of the most important and emotional things one can write about is love. This is a beautiful and deep write and I wish you the best of luck


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    Well..it is the honest and true prayer of the lvers..a heart is in love..well done..and my thanks for sharing it...


  • sOuL
    July 25, 2008

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    this is really a great poem
    no i not only liked it but also i have invited my friends to come and read this

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