Up above the hills ,
And much more above the stars ,
I want to reach there where nobody has reached so far.
To make my parents proud of me,
I want them to spend at-least something on me.
I want to study, I want to play,
To keep myself happy and gay.
I have got the ability , I have got the capability,
One needs for which to become a typical , successful Indian lady.
I want to earn something which no one has earned till now,
And that is humanity, intelligence and sympathy for all.
Ups and downs always came in my life,
But I never allowed them to stay in my life.
If I want to achieve something and be remembered every time.
I should be brave and bold enough to struggle for it anytime.
And that's the ideology of my life ,
According to which I perform every-time.
- Ankita Ashesh
Author notes
hey ppl!! this poem is very close to my heart , this being the very first poem written by me when I was 10 o 11 yrs old....... so jus bear with me if u find this one not very skilfully done ...this I think is probably my best write because it came from the core of my innocent heart .
A contest entry
- Contest with options ( prewritten poems allowed)for three days.... enter early by Manoj Sanyal.
375 points, ended July 29, 2008, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I am very Proud of you My Granddaughter!
Cyber Hugs
G-Ma -
The Best Poems Come From The Heart
My Dear Grand Daughter,
This is a refreshing wonderful quest for any of us to want to do our best. Well done and well said.
Sincerely,
G-Ma
Cheryl
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Thanks granny ...
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Very well done and never lose sight of these goals
Good luck
Simon
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Thank you for your comment . I shall never lose sight of my goals . Thanks !!
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This is very good for your first poem,and for being so young at the time. This poem truly is shared from your innocent heart. Nice job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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Thank you so much for the comment !
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congrats on HM
love always
erica carnea
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Thank you !!!
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You say you wrote this as a young child well I can only say that if you were this talented at such a young age then you must be an even better talented writer as an adult. You did a wonderful write here. And thanks for entering it in my contest.
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now that's what I call consistency, a very lovely work and life ethic you pertain to.
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thanks Titus ....m glad u liked it !!
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a heart felt write showing great promise for you as a woman and a poet...keep up the good work.
Nevadapoet
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What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
Nevadapoet
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Heyy
I like this, its so straight from the heart
who would you like to be in my ap family?
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i can be your sis, friend o something like this ....
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Ahh i'll be happy to have you in my familyy
I'll be glad to have you as a sister
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heyy thanx for considering my poem ....i am so glad ....umm wel its upto you what i can be in your ap family .....i leave it you .....thanx again !!
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well
Wise words from a young poet that often go un-noticed in todays world of quick fixes. Carry on with your goals and many shall be proud to say.. She is one I know.
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Wonderful poem and I like how powerful you voiced through these words for the reader to understand what you're wishing for and also on how you will achieve it; not may, will!
Now, the I's should be capitalized and this part is the only thing that seems kind of out of place:
"i want to study, i want to play,
to keep myself happy and gay."
It might lose the reader to continue reading because these lines sound too used or something but hey, it's not compulsory to get rid of it since this is a personal write to you which I pretty much like to read
Good write for a young person that you were; keep it up, all right!
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woah if you wrote this when you were 10/11 then thats amazing!
i don't think i knew half of the words you used in this piece when i was that age. and this is a lot better than any poems i've read by many adults
lots of luck in the contest
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This is a very peaceful poem, I like it.
If you wrote this when you were 10, then you should be very proud, the imagery you created is without a doubt more then poems i've read of 30/40 year old poets.
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I actually found it quite nice. The imagery was nice and the message wonderful. The only part that bothered me a bit was "i have got the ability , i have got the capability," ability and capabilty seems kind of like a waste because it says the same thing. I really enjoyed the positivity in your words. This is excellent for being written by a 10 year old. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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This is very mature writing for that young age. It is full of wisdom, and I thank you for sharing this. Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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It is a very good poem for a 10/11 years old ....
I enjoyed reading.
Best wishes and good luck,
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thanx !!!
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