My heart for you moon is strong as steel!
Your dark liquid tones make my broken heart heal,
The glittering ocean under you reflects pure beauty,
I will love you for ever, for you are my duty,
Not only do you light up the sky- you light up my heart,
My trust in you will never part,
The music you make is like no other sound,
The honey tones make my heart pound,
The lightening competes- and rages up a storm,
Crack! Growl! Bang! my love remains its form,
Hushing down, the yellow disappears,
The least of my dear moons fears,
The scene has calmed and again the waters clear,
I'm glad its all over, his view is now near,
My moon is my shelter, my love, my friend,
But when the morn creeps behind me...'ll know its the end.
Author notes
I have chosen the Blue Moon picture. I chose it because i love the moon and it lights up the night with a dark but welcoming glow. I've always loved the moon, i feel connected to it.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration with Options by Dancing Feather.
700 points, ended July 10, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 5 OPTION -- Prewrites allowed by Florida Sunshine.
525 points, ended July 29, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beyond your years again, Miki...you show your imagination in the mystery involved with the moon and her allure on you as well as many others...Rhyme and flow very well done!
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You did a good job on this! Well done
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Very lovely imagery in this write. I never thought of the moon in such a lovely way. The words were so sweet and calming. Thanks for entering and good lcuk
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This is a very beautiful poem. I could feel the love. I even like the way you ended this piece. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I love the rhyme it gave it a unique roll to the read. The moon is loved by many. From what I've learned it is especially by sailors. I guess it has an allure ~
Your poem certainly conveys this.
Nice job! I did enjoy reading your work. Thanks so much for entering the option contest ~
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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Good poem, though the flow of the poem was a bit bumpy and parts of it seemed to be forced rhymed. other than that it was okay. Good luck in the contest Violet Nightfall
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This poem sings with pure passion that the reader can feel! I loved the strong language you used.... a beautiful write. Thanks for entering.
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Lovely work! Very strong and descriptive in word choice...giving the reader a strong view of what you see and feel from the moon...best to you...keep up the good work...
mystic
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thank you so much
, if u want i can read some of your poetry n comment?
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Beautiful poem, Miki! Your use of descriptive language and imagery is really lovely, and really adds to the whole theme and emotions nicely.
Once again I love your style of writing, it has a smooth, calm feeling to it and isn't too highly-structured. The only thing I noticed was that one or two lines weren't quite in rhythm, so they were a little off-beat, but apart from that I really, really do love this poem! It makes readers see how deep your connection is to the moon, and how much you feel for it. You express yourself so well, and it leaves one feeling captivated and in this amazing calm state of mind.
Well done! Your poetry skills are really blooming, you're writing some truly amazing things!
- Katie
xx
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