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It's All But Too True

Nights of sleepless bleeding,

All for what I have become,

You look like death's face, an effigy,

Your venom traces like alonely raindrop,

Now that I am gone,

I have no choice in living,

I can't, your deadly venom broke me,

Beyond all return,

I can't be this hollow shell,

But alas I am.

 

My corpse lies defiantly,

In blackness, in eternity,

For the face of death is within,

My last remnants of human feeling,

This final break in the window,

 

For now;

It ends,  

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Acceptance Not my best but meh I tried

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 4

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    It breaks my heart

    I know people that are ill in many ways and friends of mine who at times feels so lost to the world .But so often I stay near for when they gwet off their medication they fall and needs their friends to be there and help them come back .If you have medications you need to take never ever get off of them because you are feeling great .They are the reason you feel better and to get off them just sends you back to that hell you so hate . I am here should you need a friend such as this Im here for you


  • Lost Vampyre Angel Greeters member
    July 3

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    ooh i liked this very much,
    its dark yet almost confusing?
    in a way i do love this alot,
    all my love, keep penning,
    kitty xxx

  • vampira1665 silver member
    July 3

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    I liked it. The background added to thw darkness in this piece. A hollow soul with no light left within. Nicely done!

    Hugs and bites,
    vampy

  • NyteShade
    July 3
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    Thanks for entering. Will read thoroughly upon Judging

  • SweetXDestiny silver member
    July 3
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    wow
    i love you auntie
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