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Mockery





midsummer nights are undone
by razor feathers
killing soft breeze

a familiar tempest
looms from below:
        i am upside down
            falling into the sky

monochrome refractions
deliberately
sing a dirge




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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    wow. this is an excellent poem.. I really enjoyed reading this.. I loved your take on the prompt.

    good luck

    kat


    • between slices
      July 3, 2008
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      i'm glad you liked it..
      sort of a random take.. it's been ages since i've written.
      lovely pic though.. couldn't resist poking my brain.

      thanks.