Cold is the only temperature she feels,
the pain inside will never heal,
she wears dark colors- blues and grays,
please God she gets out of her Emo phase.
Author notes
It is for a Competition, and the limit is 30 words, its 29 words, im sure it will be ok
A contest entry
- 10/30/30 Quickie by Sweet Impatience.
1050 points, ended July 3, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'm Feeling Kind Of... by Silver Asylum.
550 points, ended October 22, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Quite the write...very interesting...perhaps a friend but this attracts attention to someone that seems to be too emotional...you want them to change...imagery very vivid!
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Very creative and well written...much said in few words and a very interesting concept...lovely flow and just very cool...congrat's on the trophy.
mystic
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thanks, but i was really wanting an actual trophy, like gold or silver or bronze. oh well, I'll keep trying!
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i'm not a patch on you, i'm seriouse your really good, well done and never stop writing.
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well, thank u
and i shan't ever stop writing! i love it
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wow thats is brilliant, i dont know what more i can say other than
can i worship at your feet, lol,
god to be as good at poetry as you lol.
BRILLIANT
hope you win hun good luck
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many thanks
i dont think its brilliant, but thank you very much :]
your poems are great, i read some
thx for the coment,
i hope u win urs 2!
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I really love your poem.. first thing the picture that I posted as a prompt, is the one that I would like you to place in with your poem..
last line in your poem. there needs to be a period at the end of the line instead of a comma..
I'm alright with the fact that you have only 29 words.. you did fine..
just fix that and you will be fine
good luck
kat
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thanks
i fixed it all up
thx
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