Unbleached bones battle death,
bleak souls grasping every breath.
Bound by darkness, cloaked within,
extinguishing flames of cardinal sin.
Sunken sockets shed empty tears,
grim reaper breaths decay and fear.
Slicing life in which to bleed,
Satan captures souls to breed.
Multiplying sins for greed and gain,
puts the power in the devils name.
All before him tremble and shake,
carnage ignites within his wake.
Eviscerated bodies left to wither and die,
remorse shudders as it breezes by.
Devoured eternally by impalpable pain,
rampant rot flows swift through veins.
Walls of fire keep them entombed,
pitiful spirits forever doomed.
Standing still throughout time,
instilling fear into mortal minds.
Author notes
Prompt: I just want Dark.
Hope this is ok...
A contest entry
- Dark, I want Dark by Riftkin.
525 points, ended July 3, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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And Dark it is!
I love this and agree with the comment
below "Grim reaper breaths decay and fear."
indeed a fascinating paradox!
*Stands and applauds*
this is incredible!
Love it!
~Pastel
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Mind Numbing
Your style reminds of that of Dani Filth, of Cradle of Filth. "Grim reaper breaths decay and fear." Who would have thought that an act of life could be the cause of death?
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Wow, Blinding!!!
I've got to say 'You've been on fire of late'
This is fantastic...
So deep, so dark & so deliciously evil...
Again with the chills...
Well done!!!
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Excellent
Wonderful creation for a dark poem. Congratulations on the honorable mention
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wow this is beautiful,
stunning rhyme darling, i really do love this,
well deserved HM
your wording is awesome too
all my love,
kitty xxx -
, oh and i told you your poems are addictive from start to finish, i mean this is something, keep it flowing and congrads on the contest
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thank you for entering this dark poem ... the story held me from start to finish.
Riftkin
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wow this is so dark and scary a wonderful write full of the shadows of errie emotions all the way through your poem but I realy liked the following line of brilliance
Unbleached bones battle death,bleak souls grasping every breath.Devoured eternally by impalpable pain,
rampant rot flows swift through veins. Walls of fire keep them entombed,pitiful spirits for ever forever doomed.Standing still throughout time,instilling fear into mortal minds.good luck in the contest
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Oh it's dark alright!! And scary.. and wicked and just fabulous!!
You are still the Queen of Darkness!
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