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My dog is like a piece of furniture
She picks up all the smells around her
This is comforting
Strange
Like me

Your cat is like a cold, black crow
Perched upon the backs of couches
This is alarming
Strange
Like you

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  • badnovocaine
    September 19, 2008

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    Oh nice im surprised i didnt read this one earlier. I like the part about the cat. But the poem as a whole was great to.


  • drumdog79
    August 20, 2008

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    A whimsical little piece; short n' sweet, humorus in a way, with an interesting insight. A pleasure to read; a pattern I'm developing through your poetry. In an off beat way, it kind of loosely reminds me of a poem of mine called Dreams Lie.


  • mrocun
    August 20, 2008

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    Yayyy cats are awesome.
    I hope you ain't dissing them here.
    Nahh just jokin.
    Very well written poem good work.

    Samuel


  • Dienush
    July 13, 2008

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    Now this is creative. I wonder if "comforting" and "alarming" wouldn't fit and flow better as adverbs. I like the parallelism in this and how I find even a bit of love poetry in it, it's all so subtle. I love that. I think the title is less than catchy though, it's much weaker than the poem and might turn some readers away from this nice poem. Thank you for entering my contest.

    ~Diana


    • BermudaHighway
      July 13, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the honorable mention! I believe you're right about the title. I had trouble conjuring something up so I admittedly got lazy. I'm going to try and think up something more appropriate, regardless that the contest is over. Thanks again!


  • Death of the Author
    July 3, 2008
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    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4371693


    • BermudaHighway
      July 3, 2008

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      Hey I like that! Pretty cool. This actually wasn't the piece I was talking about, I decided not to post that one. Or to work on it more, perhaps. This one is something old I just happened upon. Thanks for not imploding!


      • Death of the Author
        July 4, 2008
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        I think it's I who should be thanking you for myself not imploding

        Well I shall wait with baited breath


  • Death of the Author
    July 3, 2008

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    This reminds me of something I read yesterday...

    I shall find it...

    Symmetry is always good, and good strong images. I do not seem to have imploded, so...

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