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the Clown & the Devils Show Down!!!

The clown returned to hell and faced the devil him self,Told satin he was next.Satin knew the clown had growing more powerful than before now satin must fight to keep his throne.As the battle begun more and more demons come around to watch this show down for hell.Who will be the next ruler of hell.As booth the devil and clown go at it bashing and trying to kill one another the clown pulls out his macehtte and drives into the devil side the devil forms a fire ball and throws it in to the clowns face.Booth standing bloody and beating demons jump on the clown helping there master out trying to kill this clown.The clown rips and throws demons in half and in pits of lava.With his evil laugh spears satin satin digs his hand into the clowns chest the clown digs his knife in stains chest both hurting satin rips the clowns hart out.Standing there bloody with the a smile you'll never wanna see satin rips off one of his horns and drive in the hart of the clown.Thinking the clown is dead satin is laughing but the clown gets up with his laugh now booth fighting demons start to think the clown could be the new ruler of hell.Could he be?As booth go at it the clown rips off satins tail whiping stain with it satin turns the odds on the clown satin takes the riped of horn out of the clowns hart and drives it through the clown head.Pinning him to a wall satin rips off the arms,rips out the clowns spin and takes all the souls the clown colected and with one firey blow with satins hand the clown is dead.Walking away bloody and hurting looks at the demons and the firey hell and says victory is mine.Satin sits on his throne and laughs the evilest laugh ever.

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  • Piccola gold member
    July 4
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    Interesting story, but it needs punctuation and there are a lot of spelling errors. For instance

    you need to change the spelling of Satin ... to Satan, or else you change him to a soft luxuriant fabric. ;)  in places you need to replace there with their (it is theirs, it belongs to them) With a bit of editing it might hold the reader's attention longer.  

  • Lol nice. I thought the clown would win. This is a good finish to the first part. Dark and good!!! Keep up the good work babe. ♥ Brook