Memories, deep inside
buried, to make pain subside
slowly, without notice, eruption starts
attacking, at first the heart
slowly, creeping along
the soul gets lost, by that one wrong
until finally the day comes
someone finally notices, you’re someone
now fears need to be faced
what’s buried deep within, needs be erased
Or is it too late?
*Rdrl*
Author notes
'Banana splits'
A contest entry
- Lost Yourself, Find Yourself by dreamersalwayslive.
735 points, ended July 30, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a great piece of work! I agree with the two below me, the imagry is fantastic! The subtle ryhme was done nicely, and it really adds to the feel of the poem. In my opinion, I think a couple of periods would be nice here and there. But, some people prefer it this way. All in all, it's a surely lovely piece!
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dreamersalwayslive
thank you so much for the comment and opportunity to enter your contest.
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I really think this is one of the best I've read from you! I can really relate and your imagery is fantastic, your rhyme scheme is great and it flows so well when spoken. Brilliant stuff!!
Bravo
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elemental angel
thank you so much for that wonderfull comment, you know how I appreciate your comments.
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I liked the imagery i got with this piece. Nicely done.
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Mistressofillusion
thank you for your comment, it's much appreciated
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