The darkness encloses me.
This I realize,
but I feel nothing.
Physically, emotionally, I am numb.
My vision is blurred,
as are the thick lines of reality.
I am slipping into
everything I am afraid of.
I have no more left.
No more trust,
no more soul,
no more love.
Hours ago,
I felt the tingle
of my body falling asleep.
Now, nothing.
On this December night,
I see only my breath.
I feel only the cold.
I hear only the sound of your words..
"She was over at my house and it just..happened. I'm so sorry.."
You can save it for her, then.
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Denali
A contest entry
- Fire and Ice by Hata mig.
455 points, ended July 27, 2008, 21 entries
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Comments
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I relate to this
This piece holds so many issues,many of which I can relate to.I engaged with this. -
Such intense emotions..I love the way you've put it all together..the last stanza stood out to me and I like it a lot!!..thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!
Keep Penning!!!
Lieu
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but I feel nothing.
Physically, emotionally, I am numb
i love it. i'm probably not gonna keep this contest open unless i get more enteries but this would have been one of my favs -
Ouch. It's July now, but I just had shivers run through me. I must say, however, that the first stanza was a bit cliche. But, overall, I do love this piece. Great write and good luck in the contest.
God bless,
~Praise~
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