Pointless
to shed hollow tears,
over bones
that cease to ache.
I've been called ......
.... home.
Author notes
prompt: let me go (in 15 words or less)
In a list
A contest entry
- Prompt 10 entries/ 15 words or less by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended July 3, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
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Wow! Beautiful.
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This greatness.
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Oh Cuz! This is brilliant I see why you won gold
I am so proud of you 
Lynda
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Daddy this is very powerful, & strong.. I love it.
"over bones that cease to ache" I love this line
daddy the imagery you used is excellent.. so much said in few words..
Congratulations on the Gold... You deserved it..
love you
kat
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thank you for the lovely comment, glad you were able to immerse yourself in the words and enjoy it.
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sorry i forgot applause
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you fit so much into so few words. u definately deserved the gold! congratulations!!!!! It was a beautiful and descriptive write!
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thank you for the comment, I truly appreciate your remarks.
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Over bones that cease to ache, I've been called home. Wonderful poem about waiting and acceptance into heaven! Gongrad's on the gold! ~Sie
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wow. interesting take. i liked it in that being called , home, could mean so many things , or at least to me it did... thanks for sharing your work...
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Strongly emotional and well stated in brevity...a time that comes in all our lives when we know it is time...nicely done...thank you for sharing!
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wow so well expressed in so few words too..good luck
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Oh wow thats deep Scott. *blinks* I like where you took this. Truely another one of your talented writes.
I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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