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Morning Rises

Pushing aside,
it's blankets
the first hint
of morning rises.
Extending it's self.
Stretching,
to spread
a peach blush
good morning.

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  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 3, 2008
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    Morning has risen beautifully in your poem. A couple of technical things:

    "it's blankets" should be "its blankets"
    "Extending it's self." should be "Extending itself."

    Some beautiful images are presented in your poem. Thank you for your entry. ~Pamela