"Come out to play," she whispered.
I stayed stationary, shaking.
"Its alright, just follow me.." she continued
and slithered in circles around my feet.
'Should I ..." I thought to myself.
"Please!" her voice was louder now.
The playfulness almost completely dissolved.
I shook my head.
She snaked up my legs to my arms
pulling me forward, forcefully.
"Just a bit further, Love"
She was whispering directly in my ear now.
The edge was getting closer.
I could feel it.
She'd almost pushed me over the border.
She was tangled in my hair.
Hissing to advance,
She was hard to resist.
What was coming?
That was to be remained unknown:
The reason I was here,
paralyzed.
I was consumed with her.
She was me and I, her.
Her pulling, me resisting
and failing.
Fear flooded me
as though it ran in my veins.
Pounding throughout me,
A new pulse of its own:
Faster, Foreign, Frightening.
She had called to me before,
but never like this
and now I am filled.
Inescapable ..
Beware..
She's simply waiting to tempt you beyond repair ...
Author notes
"The oldest and strongest emotion of mankind is fear. And the oldest and strongest kind of fear is fear of the unknown."
~H. P. Lovecraft~
my like first REAL dark write... I hope it turns out ok..
Take it as you will it could mean more than one thing... >= )
In a list
A contest entry
- Come Join The Dark Side by Re-invention.
1376 points, ended July 17, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please leave a comment of sorts. ( they all get 5 stars :D)
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Awesome write! I could of sworn I have commented on this piece! I love how you have written about the little voice tempting you to do things. Great write! Congrats on the HM! Thanks for sharing!
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Its always the Voice's fault. always... its suck a wicked little twisted freak.
( I think its a lady in red myself)
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Ah..what a strong impressions of the sentiments you sketched with a wonderful impact as well..this is a very sharp thought ..well done...
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this is an amazing write!!! i love it!
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Awesome write here
I hear of this so often with the young saying the voices I can t stop the voices they tell me to do these things I cant stop them . I want to tell you you can to get off any drugs other than the medications you may be on by your dr. And take those drugs if they are helping you if not go back and tell your dr its not working and see if they cant give you something that will . Now if you are on the street drugs the only way to stop the screams within is to stop the drugs . Be free of the soul less monster within that guides tou to the edge stop now for each day she does get stronger as you continue to take and feed her .You and only you can decide to live and defy the monster that holds you captive .
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O.o ummm ok. Well.. I'm not on drugs nor am I on the streets. It is simply a contest write. Its my interpretation of the quote. Thanks for the comment though. They are always appreciated.
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This is so cool! I love you used your imagination in it.I loved it. Keep writing darkish poems!
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This is really cool! And good quote choice, too. ^.^
This is an excellent representation of temptation, and of the fear of not knowing where it will lead you. That devilish snake seems to tangle us all up in something at some point in our lives.
Excellent work! Great take, and good luck!
--Flare
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wow! greta great take on this hun.. loved thei maginary you played in it and how you made it like an anecdote .. your originality amazes me sweety.. there's nothing to critize brutely in this... at least not from me
the lines;
I was consumed with her.
She was me and I, her.
Her pulling, me resisting
and failing.
realyy played out well with the prompt...well done
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Lovely poem so far xD
LMAO！
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