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The cutting knifes

 

Shaded eyes, volcanic ashes,

spider-webs draped from their lashes.

Cutting too deep to feel the hurt,

yet weeping hearts beneath their shirts.

They hide within the falling leaves,

hiding their scars beneath their sleeves.

Someday I hope someday I pray

that all their pain could fade away.

And happiness would fill their lives,

as they lay down the cutting knifes.

 

 

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Shaded-eyes, volcanic-ashes,

spider-webs draping from lashes.

Cutting deep to feel the hurt,

bloody-hearts beneath clean shirts.

They hide within falling leaves,

secret-scars beneath their sleeves.

Someday I hope someday I pray

all their pain could fade away.

And happiness would fill their lives,

from laying down the carving-knifes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 2, 2008

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    this is amazing, i really love your wording,
    it blew me away cin, the theme is also amazing,
    all my love, keep penning,
    kitty xxx


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    July 2, 2008

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    Cindy

    This is the way I feel too, its like you pray that their pain goes away, or that at least they find some way else to release the pain. Because you are forever worried that the next cut will be to deep.

    God Bless
    Tammy