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Darling, I'm Not Your Whore [So Don't Treat Me Like One]




& am I only sexy when I'm moaning your name

[is.this.the.only.way.baby.]

holding you close to my body and pushing you in,

every fucking inch that I take -

just.a.lil.bit.more.to.make.me.love.you.baby.


The smiles, the sighs && the moans,

you'd let out when pressing my trembling thighs

against your quivering crotch, it's not fair how you

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of me [dontwanthisshitanymore].



Baby, when I say I ♥'d you, I meant it

& when I said I needed you forever it was t:r:u:e -

why do I have to be your p.l.a.y.m.a.t.e. to get through,

because all I ever wanted was to kiss.your.lips

and call you mine [you always meant the most to me].


Come on now bby, come play my game and say you love me,

even if it's just a simple lie;; I could do with some euphoria,

even if it's just a little bit of cocaine crenzy, I don't care -

I need a taste of vodka and bacardi with a little heroin smile.


Honey, if I'm lying nearly dead on the floor & my ♥beats faint,

will my smiles and kisses matter to you - will you feel sorry for the whorr-ific things you done?


Oh baby, whilst I bleed betrayal -

I lala-love you even more, because you broke me.



& baby everyone knows that broken china is the same as a broken girl. ♥

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  • Well done. I think that dirty pretty suits this type of poem very well. I think it conveys the jarring , torn emotions well. Great job with this.

    Mike


  • Candy Morphine
    December 25, 2008

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    FUCKING EXCELLENT!
    EXACTLY what i was looking for!!
    this is amazing. could you message me your APname so i could look at some of your other work?
    if you dont have time; never mind,
    but this is freaking beautiful!


  • glamour guts
    July 13, 2008

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    "Baby, when I say I ♥'d you, I meant it

    & when I said I needed you forever it was t:r:u:e -

    why do I have to be your p.l.a.y.m.a.t.e. to get through,

    because all I ever wanted was to kiss.your.lips

    and call you mine [you always meant the most to me]."


    now THIS is dirty pretty!!
    i loved it with a passion! i relate on so many different levels and the personal level at witch this poem was written are amazingly showed.i am seriously in love with it =]

  • Page Deleted.
    July 11, 2008

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    The part of the poem which said:
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    was a bit hard to read, but aside from that, I loved this, especially the lines:

    "& when I said I needed you forever it was t:r:u:e -
    why do I have to be your p.l.a.y.m.a.t.e. to get through,"

    &&

    "& baby everyone knows that broken china is the same as a broken girl. ♥"

    Thanks for entering && best of luck.

    Keira
    -- blackwood.baby


  • silver-X-lining gold member
    July 4, 2008

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    My God.
    I love this. so. freaking. much. There's so much meaning in these words, and so much feeling besides. Well done, this is fantastic.


    "why do I have to be your p.l.a.y.m.a.t.e. to get through,
    because all I ever wanted was to kiss.your.lips
    and call you mine [you always meant the most to me]."


    ~HH


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    July 3, 2008

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    i think i need to lay down or something here, this was kind of a verbal roller coaster, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 2, 2008
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    Wow. I have not been a fan of this genre. Most of what I have seen is very poorly written and notable for shock value only. I am impressed. You have something to say and say it well.

    Great job.

    Best of luck in the contest.

    Mike


  • And Hyetal
    July 2, 2008
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    wowww. I loved it. I wish I knew how to write dirty pretty.

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