Years passed yet I still remember
every incident in that drained winter
Violent aching thunder spread the shame
Secrets crawl back whispering your name
The games you played devoured every hope
Hanging by a thread where you held the rope
My blurred screams bit your shapeless lies
Holding back the years in a timeless disguise
A fight where the sweat burnt us both
melting all the colors you were never worth
A shadow I followed claiming to be your love
A wound that scarred, I'm still ashamed of
And the bleeding rose,once reddish, now is fading
Regretting the shades of promises you've been making
Can't keep tracing the shadow's steps of yours
Erasing all memories of that crappy moors.
Author notes
It was about any Ex, that I totally Got Over, Finally 
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excellent job with this poem, very dark and powerful.
"My blurred screams bit your shapeless lies
Holding back the years in a timeless disguise"
these lines really caught me. very well done. thanks for entering and good luck -
Very nicely written! I really enjoyed this write. I have been there too, and know what it is like to finally get rid of the shadows. A great work on this one!
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The shadow I see as the love that remains in thought, yet not in actuality of the one who the heart looks to. Pained and thoughtful, yet vague in a sense as well. Abstract emotions throughout. Thank you for your entry!
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Harsh? there is nothing I didn't like about your poem. It shows creativity (the rhyming.. which I can't do), it is emotional and very different from what you would normally read. it shows you have your own writing style. This was indeed a beautiful dark piece
Thankyou for entering and good luck!
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lol, Thanks alot. It was my 2nd time to try to write after my block-write. & I'm very glad you liked it.
Thnx for the HM
You are the one who made my day.
Heba
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written well
this was really a dark piece on being set free from a extremely harsh relationship.. that is how I see it. I liked the flow until the ending. I wouldn't change a thing, I do believe the ending is what gives it a twist.
Yvonne
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Thanks a million for your lovely comment. I appreciate it so much.& I'm so glad you liked it. it seems I got over it
Heba
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