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Blood Hungry

We are creatures of the night
Feeding on your blood
With such a lust for the kill
We are hunters
We are killers
Stalking our pray
Within the midnight hours
We are the lonely ones
Vampires
Damned to the darkness

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  • xochocoholicxo
    October 11
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    bite me i like it thank you for entering


  • FinalWhisper
    September 11

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    OK

    Not a bad write in of itself but it leaves a lot to be desired. Far to short and doesn't grab onto my mind enough, especially for as short as it is. However, it has a decent flow and even better potential. I did enjoy reading it, and you could say it was short and sweet.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Truly and Darkly,
    Dirk


  • Concrete Angel silver member
    August 21

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    I love how this is so short yet sums up vampires so perfectly. I like how it ends with simply "damned to the darkness". It just left me trailing in thought. The red background's a little bright, but I can just hide it
    Thanks for entering!


  • WordsAndWits
    August 21

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    I enjoyed this. Although I've never had any interest in reading about vampires, I liked it. Shouldn't pray be prey? I also like the background, it fits the prompt. Great job and I wish you luck,
    - Caroline


  • NarniaKid
    August 17

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    This is great! The backround is bright! The poem itself is BRILLIANT!
    Well Done and Keep Writing!

    -Crystal

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 28
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    this was awesome! i loved it! WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • Unbreakable3
    July 21

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    This isn't against you just the poem, but ever seince i read twilight about 2 years ago and then a year ago the vampire craze kicked in i'm so sick of vampires that i can't stand it sorry. Thanks for the entery anyway.


  • black-phenoqu
    July 14

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    this is ok.

    it has good imagery, but i believe this could be taken further. to tell more of a story, and not just the background info.


  • glazecovered
    July 7
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    pray->prey...

    This is very close to emo...

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    July 3
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    LOVED IT! this was amazing! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    June 29

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    I think Vampires are nice and not entirely damned.. lol
    I enjoyed this short dark piece. You did a very good job in a few lines. Well done.
    I could feel the horror, the darkness and the need to feed and be satiated.
    Fear-evoking and provoking piece!

    (just one typo, "pray" should be "prey").

    Thank you so much for entering, keep on writing and good luck.

    Nooni


  • Antebellum
    June 25

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    "Within the midnight hours
    We are the lonely ones"

    loved these lines.
    thanks for entering
    &
    Good luck


  • Dryad Enya
    June 25

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    This short and succulant bloody work is brillaint. If you really like vampires may i suggest reading: 'The historain' by Elizabeth Kostova.

    It's about dracula and so forth but far more interesting, i suggest having a firm grasp on the english language before reading it however!

    This is a lovely write so well done!
    Gorecki.


  • ladybug.
    June 23

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    Eeeewh, gross :] Actually, it was really well done. I don't want to be stalked by one of these vampires; thanks for sharing ♥

  • XxLoverOfDarknessxX
    June 18

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    i liked this, given i really like vampires. hehe. i loved this poem. it was awesome!!!! LOVED IT!! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!


  • The cliche typo
    June 14
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    welcome to my contest

    a wonderfull poem-

    i love that last line

  • The cliche typo
    June 14

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    just a reminder

    (a note for the all of your poems enntered in my contest- i wont add any poems to the finalist list if i dont know wich option it is based on)


  • The cliche typo
    June 14
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    good peom- plese enter wich option this s in the authors notes

    thanx for entering my contest


  • Devilish Temptation
    August 2, 2008

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    "Within the midnight hours
    We are the lonely ones"

    Fantasically put my friend I like it powerful in a dark form. thankx for your entry it is appeciated good luck in the contest


  • okadadokie
    July 24, 2008
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    So very very true. >.< I agree with everything in the poem. Great job.

    ~Oka/KC @};-


  • attack110
    July 15, 2008
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    That's amazing hun, well done with that, it feels so alive as i read it. great work.


  • techno-tard
    July 5, 2008
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    I like it! well written while being so short


  • Devilish Temptation
    July 3, 2008
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    Cool poem I like it as I am a Sang Vamp myself, We don't kill or stalk our prey but it's good


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    July 2, 2008

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    Short but i liked it alot. Its very well written. My favorite part was when you said "We are creatures of the night
    Feeding on your blood" that was very well worded. Thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly

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