A dream whispers into a heart,
A wish silently creeps into a soul.
Hope breathes for the very first time,
Awareness slips into being.
Sunlight glances brilliantly,
A prism of rainbows, captured by dawn.
Mother Moon's starry children retreat,
A glorious profusion of capering colours.
All caught in a timeless moment, where
The world stands breathless in a single heartbeat.
A contest entry
- PIF - Picture Inspired by AliceinPoetryLand.
850 points, ended July 16, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Only Prewrites by Samplette.
1000 points, ended September 20, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feel free to be as critical (or not) as you like...
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I agree that this is beautifully done! Was a pleasure to read! Thanks for sharing it and best wishes in the contest.
Frogz~ -
Beautifully penned. Tender and inspiring. Very well written. I thank you for entering the contest.
Sam
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'The world stands breathless in a single heartbeat.'
sums it up well.
Beautiful. -
Exacting Imagery
of you have painted a profusion of wealth thereof. Wonderfully Written and Brillantly Done.
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Oh this is just gorgeous!I agree with Ten about the immensity of the image and how you took the drop to express that small moment.
Thanks so much for your entry
Gaylene
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There is such a sense of great and small in these lines. The broad and the minute. All of this immensity of image and sensation captured in a small moment, the whole world in a single heartbeat. I LOVE that effect. Lovely entry.
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i love how everything here seems to be a personification plus the idea of the entire world being in sync for a moment.
I like its brevity- long poems lose my patience.
This is 10 lines of excellence =]
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