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clockwork unbecoming

 

 

 

 

 
She ascends her smile on a Monday,
measures that small-stepped evening

by holding the intangible space

between her hands
 

and the instinct of palms is to press

against each other, so she grapples

with the ocean, sifts salt from memory

to mark the unsettled silence
of unbelonging-
 
to discover that mass has weight

only when touched.

 

 

 

She is hollow by Tuesday.

 

 

 

Her water has an unbroken edge.

It separates all this from the other side

of empty, from unseen moments
in the Braille of age on skin.
 
                   [ but only the lines felt from inside. ]

 

A Wednesday comes-

she stops on a hilltop to gather a view,
one small enough to carry in stillness,

to wrap into night.

 

Like her, the dark is anonymous here

and spread large enough to rise,

to notice the effort of dying this way.
 
 

 
The shape of indifference is a sum of absence,
 
 


so it is here, in this now,
deep in the becoming,
 
 
that her fingers
 

 

 

 

 
pause.



 


          [ It is a Thursday. ]
 
 
 
 
 
 

 

 

 

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  • the denoument made me gulp
    thank you for making me understand
    it is only sunday and tuesday awaits...


  • Naridill gold member
    July 9

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    I would un-italic the last line, but that's more so personal preference. The rest of the poem is beautiful - in tone and mood.

  • "and the instinct of palms is to press
    against each other,"

    Amazing.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 2

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    {whispers}

    publishpublishpublishpublishpublishpublish
    publishpublishpublishpublishpublishpublish
    publishpublishpublish already, will ya?!?



  • Cherokee
    July 2

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    I really like this Kate. I'm horrible with comments but I just like everything about it, from the seaside metaphors to the subtle mention of Braille that brings the ending home. Loved it girl!


  • rendezvous
    July 2

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    I'm nearly too distracted by your innovative abstractions of imagery to see woe in this branch of brilliance. Perhaps that be the goal.

    I'm awed.

  • for me, the "becoming" is an abandonment - leaving all behind - risking all to the unknown - when the light leaves the world in an anonymous (and omininous) darkness of being. this poem hits the mark for me.

    blessings and best wishes,



    ~r.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    July 2

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    and the instinct of palms is to press
    against each other, so she grapples
    with the ocean, sifts salt from memory
    to mark the unsettled silence
    of unbelonging-

    you know.... enough .... I suspect
    to know how deep ...that hits me..

    not that the entire write doesn't.. no, but that passage.
    ...

    ah..
    no... how on earth could I critique that place called home...


  • I agree with Suzanne ... this sounds more a becoming ... not abandoning the previous but absorbing and moving forward into the best part of the week

  • "The shape of indifference is a sum of absence"

    ...one of those 'wish I pomed that' moments.

    this is a travelogue through days that I will have to read again (and likely again after that)

    but the abandonment does not feel woeful to me, more liberating.



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