Slivers of who we used to be
linger deep within these hollow shells,
scars remain fresh
in the aftermath of bitter dispute,
blood still pouring from the thorns
embedded into unsuspecting flesh.
Strange how two souls can converge
at the whim of fate,
yet collide so violently at every turn,
that reconciliation would intrude
upon the realms of impossibility.
Agreeing to disagree,
we stand proudly in our corners,
prepared for any offensive strike
at a seconds notice.
A wise man
would dump a pile of soil between us,
so that the hatchet may be buried
once and for all.
Despite intentions,
only the fool hardy would dare
to step into the fray.
And should an accord be reached,
let the peacemaker
mark that time in a bottle,
for that will define the end game,
where David and Goliath
are declared equals.
Author notes
Option A: titles - my choice from available list "time in a bottle", which is also the title of a great song performed by Jim Croce.
In a list
A contest entry
- Let's Mix It Up by Faithbound.
520 points, ended July 4, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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omg this is amazing Cuz
SO powerful in message and metaphor...
You never cease to amaze me ...
I am so proud of you. COngrats on your well deserved Silver!
Lynda
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This is wonderful poetry. :f
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if you knew me and my relationship - or ex-relationship - you would understand when i say... perfect... words i lacked you spilled out and i swear you must have experience... which i am sorry for anyone to go through... great write...
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thanks for the great comment, sorry to hear this piece mirrors your life so closely - hope this can help extract some positives out of the situation.
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Wonderful Poem
Your words are amazing!!! I love this poem and its meaning. I felt this way a few time in my life. And I found it was better to bury the hachet and move on. I love these lines...
A wise man
would dump a pile of soil between us,
so that the hatchet may be buried
once and for all.
Thank you for sharting and best of luck in this contest. Should be a winner in my book!! You take care.
Sandy 
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wonderful comment
as always it's a pleasure to have you visit my pages and let me know how much you enjoyed the piece or how deeply you connected with it. sad to know you connected with this one, though it always heartens me when you speak so fondly of my words.
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I think you did a great job with this. to me, it suits the prompt perfectally!!! Thanks for letting me read this. I really enjoyed the fourth stanza. Good luck with this.
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thank you, glad you enjoyed the read.
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