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the moon hangs in the DARKness

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the moon hangs in the DARKness

heated rides are taken across the sky

many are trying to reach from beyond

hell still lives in the fingertips like traps

ghosts and demons continue haunting the castle

the land is alive through the queen of DARKness

she is the island of life and death complete

love and heartbreak is cast in the same spell

escaping her presence is not an option

imagination becomes reality in time

surviving the elements requires an open mind

she's an angel that acquires evil by adoption

the only way to heaven is through her hell

let the journey begin without it ending in defeat

focus on the mission or lose to total DARKness

remember, nothing comes easy without a few hassles

defense is the better offense in avoiding being zapped

diligence is key to winning for there is no magical wand

one false move and death could be the final cry

the moon hangs in the DARKness

 

 

 

 

 

 

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20 lines; picture inspired.

Please credit "Terra Exorcism Surveillance - George Grie" in your AN.

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  • Kathraina silver member
    August 10

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    Very good job on this piece.
    I love the dark tale you've woven here!
    Fantastic flow and very vivid imagery.
    Bravo


    ♥ Kate


  • angelica silver member
    July 5, 2008

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    My DARK friend is back

    Hi DARK, Good to see you back and writing a poem.
    Your poem is magnificent my dear friend, very powerful words you have penned. Ahhh it's good to have you back.
    Don't stay away too long please.
    Love Joan


    • theDARK1 gold member
      May 31
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      joan, thnx as it seems i was almost a year away from the DARKside but have penned something today i was feel to post, luvya, DARK.


  • Luckintheshadows
    July 4, 2008

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    I really like what you've penned here. I like the thoughfulness that seems to have gone into it, and the whole cadence of your poem leaves me with a very strong sense of calm.
    The only (very) little thing that put me off was the word "zapped" kind of threw the whole line off kilter, for me anyway, just my humble opinion.
    On the whole though, a truly brilliant write, and an excellent take on the prompt.

    Many thanks for sharing, and for entering my contest,

    Luck.


  • vampira1665 silver member
    July 3, 2008
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    I have missed the DARK one. Sounds like a poem about me. Tho this Queen of Darkness has seen a bit more light in the past year I still have my wicked little side.

    I hope you are doing well and I am so glad to see beautiful words from you once again.

    Hugs and bites,
    vampy

    • theDARK1 gold member
      May 31
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      thnx for the loving comment and kudos, DARK.

      ps: sorry for such a late response, but have not been here for a great while.

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