As if the angels plucked the golden stars
And spread them on earth, one by one with care,
'neath the sunlit sky, a golden flare
A cascade of daffodils on the hilly square..
That was where, the lords and ladies danced
Cheering with joy, fully tranced..
Hopping amidst the daffodil blooms
As if the flowers were maids and raindrops, their grooms
They sang aloud, as it drizzled slight..
Clouds were jealous, they guessed; hoping to be right ~
For that's their paradise, their land of delight
Where Daffodils and violets, blossomed bright..
As if the angels spread the golden stars
"The skies ~ our own, the world is ours.."
They sang their song with bells to trite..
Aloud they sang, as it drizzled slight..
A contest entry
- Winklings and Allpoetry Friends. #99 Fantasy Worlds by Lyndon.
3000 points, ended July 25, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I adore this love. Your words are so beautiful, wondrous is a good word. You create magical poems that really send me into a whole new world. I love it!
Shari
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What A World You Take Us To!
You have penned a wondrous write here, dear r...as the older days of ventures in the daffodil gardens, and flora and fauna of long ago...Just a delight to read, and the picture enhances the scribing perfectly...So joyous with word, imagery "as if the flowers were maids and raindrops, their grooms" All is just magnificently written! Bookmarked!
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Thanks dear.. 'am honored!! thanks for your kind encouragement!!
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100th HOODWINK !
Raspberry,
This is a lovely poetic vision, it flows with splendid grace and vivid imagery. The rhyme is delicious, well done!
I am going to bookmark this so I can come back and revisit this gem. Write on dear poet!
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Dennis
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This paints quite a lovely picture^^
Thank you so much for delivering my second comment,
Your poem reminded me of the place where the fairies camped out in "A Midsummers Nights Dream."
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Teamalice
hi! thanks for the comment. i like your poems very different
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I enjoyed your poetry! Like your web page
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good
I like it, I can almost smell the flowers.
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too trite...
Rhyming couplets are generally pleasing. Sure, this is pure fantasy. It looks like a gentle riot of spring in illustration and images.
Thank you for entering.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Wonderful rhyme in this beautiful daffodil land. One of my favorite flowers for its strength sturdiness.
Well done. I think to in the second to last line should be too.
Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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this is my kind of poetry, its watching something with an artists eyes, so beautifully expressed, it was pleasurable to read
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i liked it
i could imaging being there..
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Lovely. Daffodils are beautiful.
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Great!
I love daffodils
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