words some times
litter the ground
in my efforts to clear
them from my mind
trying to stay afloat
in my often chaotic blindness-
sometimes wondering
where I shouldn't go,
when exhaustion, seeps
into my body
and often in my soul,
choosing for me
things to say,
letting the coldness
steal the light
away....I got
lost inside there
and I am struggling to
break free....
with the hope
of maybe you will
see the truth
inside of me...
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I love the hopeful nature to this.
I find the first verse very inspiring. The notion of bobbing upon a sea of words really gets my mind a tickin'
Better move back a little just incase I blow a gear,
kj
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i can't say anything about this poem other then i like it, it was golden, keep it flowing
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Sometimes...
indeed.
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Wow. You had me from the beginning and held me until the end. A most wonderful poem...and I love the last few lines especially. Call me a hopeless romantic. Your word choice was brilliant and I felt very satisfied with how you wrote it. Loved the feeling of hope in this. Great job!
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thanks for the comment,and I am glad that you enjoyed reading it. this one was a off the cuff write this morning, so thank you very much!
cheers
Grey
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with the hope
of maybe you will
see the truth
inside of me...
Very powerful words here..Excellent write my friend!
**Ktulu Blackwolfe**
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thank you....
it's getting there..
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