Bagels
On a white piece of paper
with blue lines
I'm writing a poem
and I'm calling it
Bagels
"cause that's what it's all about
and I'm really hungry
and only had Raisin Bran for breakfast
cereal isn't really good enough
and doesn't cut the deal
and though I know this seems very whiny
it's not
it's sensible
I work in an office
five hours a day
five days a week
and I don't have enough time
for Breakfast
I'm hungry
Author notes
Charles Bkowski
and a little Osoanon Nimuss
A contest entry
- The Asshole's Contest: Good Poet's BORROW, Great Poet's STEAL! by Avatar of Innocence.
1800 points, ended July 5, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Bagels, I'm not a fan. But this had me laughing. Good stuff!
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Thank you for introducing me to Charles Bukowski. I really didn't know about him or what made him so great despite his (somewhat) recent death. I think you emulated him pretty well. The poem on its own, does seem a bit flat, but when compared to the gritty nuances of Bukowski, it illuminates (for me especially) the ignorant.
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lol I really really hate Bukowski lol, but this poem had me gigglin' like there was no tomorrow. Seriously, this was clever, and I had fun reading it, and it was well-written without any grammatical issues or spelling errors or typos. Its so absurd to write a poem about bagels, but it totally works. The final lines are great. The abruptness of the las line had me giggling again before it was all said and done.
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