She's looking in the mirror and thinking
'I'm not good enough, I need to be prettier.
So I'll get blonde streaks,
and get all my fat sucked out.
Then I'll get a new wardrobe
and a new haircut.
I'll be on the fast track
to happiness.'
But she won't.
She'll continue living her life full of
shallowness and mediocrity.
And at the end of the day,
she'll be the same person that she was before.
She won't change for the better
but she will change for the worse,
and changing her appearance only makes her feel worse
about her naturally brown hair
and her tendency to eat a lot and exercise little.
As she sinks deeper into her whirlpool
of hate and rage,
the cycle starts again.
Author notes
This poem isn't about me, or anyone I know. It was for a contest called 'Seven Deadly Sins' by Ethereal One. The sin I wrote about is #2 - Vanity.
A contest entry
- The Seven Deadly Sins Contest by Ethereal One.
600 points, ended July 4, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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nice work :)
Hey,
Just so you know, this is Katie from school, one of the class book-lovers
I really like this poem, despite the fact that it doesn't rhyme - this makes it interesting. It gives deep insight into emotions, and is written eloquently and imaginatively.
Well done, keep up the good work
xx -
terrible
this is reelly bad and ur a stupid emo hahah hee hee hee -
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I'm not an emo. Neither is this poem. And if you're going to criticise me and this poem, at least make it constructive criticism.
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Many woman today are obsessed by their looks. They spend all of their time trying to change themselves, and your poem expresses this well. They think that changing their outside will make them happy, but find that it doesn't work that way.
Thank you for your entry, and best of luck to you!
Ethereal One
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