A cartoon face with blow up hands.
You wore sexy new top, and flip flops.
While we were out shopping, a door ding.
Men came in for more than Helter-Skelter.
I sat three good feet from the boob tube.
As your blood splashed down upon my back.
So when I turned to catch it, your lost face?
Cereal spilled all over my new pajamas.
They dragged her with baby to kitchen,
But damnit the best knifes were gone, so
my new tooth grew in just fine thanks.
For nothing was left, but your cursive.
Now covered up chalklines at the hospice.
For hippies that dance while nude, and.
A story on tv. sure stole your sunshine,
But never could a bent cross dare brand you.
"My summer job comes once a year, Sir,"
said the pool man out loud to his bad hand.
Under waters of chlorine your eyes burst.
That was no ordinary punk rock band.
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Written January 4th, 2004
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Different. I think that is why I enjoyed reading it. Its not like everyone else poems. Very original. Good Job!! Thanks so much for entering my contest
Despair
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Definitely deep and rich in meaning. Good luck in the contest.
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lol awesome write!!
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nice.. realy different. the picture realy helped me understand it and it was great. Great write!
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Yeah, that other person was right, this is a crazy poem. Some of the subjects mentioned in here were a lil funny. The picture was cool in a way. Good luck in the contest, and thanks for sharing.
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ooh I leeks. it took me a wee bit of a while to figure it out and stuffit but that made eet better. the picture tis funny and grand.......she's leek a peeking duck behind those penny. o and just so you know twas dear old spongey man that did the raping not the french. marvelous poem.
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I like it muchly. I think I love the way you write. The picture brings it together. Kudos. -
wow, felt like typing a bit did we? Geeze, you're hired. You're my publicist. Sheeze, you explained that In ways even I didn't see yet. Like how she's peeking out from behind the copper, because obviously that's just a mistake on my alignments part that turned out... better?! cool. thanks, let me know where to send the checks.
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pennies for your thoughts? dead eyes the beautiful woman looks the fuck off the graffitti the hitler moustache and the salute that matches the play on words the links between the carton character and the teeth the link that she was once little and cute and is now so sophisticated she is downright scarey bet she smells so nice. what would i say to her or her to me. the incredible differences and gaps ...the gaps in teeth spuna spew and tuna fish she smells of fish...the cute little sugar the teeth that go as she gets older and from when she was younger the hatred towards her to so graffitti her the way her head comes out of her hands as though she is a mutant she has already been airbrushed now she is felt tip brushed.torn paper destroyed and rebuilt to your fashion the way you want things to be the way we all want things to be the cartoon is at the front unchanged with shiney boots like a regime all neat saluting as if in a regime also which links back to social conditioning from being very young and also to the nazis yet again she was raped and ruined as all women have been perhaps as the world has been by nationalism. its all things you can think and go round and round with,.. so what did i think of the art.brilliant of course. i am sure theres loads of stuff i missed and that you could tell me about and that everyone will see something different. defacement of beauty anarchy collage tradition of art culture high couture spoilt rich lifestyles the children tiny children believing in a dream. god you have set me off now.she is dead but she peeps out from behind her image to see if we are still looking at her....shall i stop yet....all in all it is a very thought provoking and provocative image and then theres the hand of the artist in there versus the printing machine...graffitti and defacement of the establishment and established ways of doing things.Visually its very clever because its not easy to do simple pieces like this but you have great shapes in there and the colours that shouldnt work do so its very simple and clever maybe its the writing and the black that holds it all together plus the contrasts as your eyes are drawn to the two pairs of eyes.its very clever and ingenious.
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Cool.
That was a crazy poem. Took me a while to follow. I really like the picture. It is very cool, Somthing I can relate to when I do collages. So random but, at the same time makes sence. Great. -
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i hate the idea of eyes bursting. i tipyytoed through this one holding my breath just in case. good read.
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