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Blackened Ash Plain

Judgment Into heaven I shall not pass.
So my sins have led me here.
Confronted by miles of blackened ash plain.
An unfamiliar sound arises from the distance.
I begin my journey but it shall not take me far.
As I make my first step onto the unhallowed ground.
My mind is flooded with screams.
The ground begins to crack.
Fire spits from the earth.
Bone hands grasp my ankles.
Brings me to my knees.
Out from the ground spews blood soaked chains.
Suspended now three feet from the ground.
My cloths ripped from my body.
My vision blurs my mouth fills with bile.
A pain in my stomach as its ripped open from within.
My entrails manipulated by an invisible phantasm.
Start slowly crawling into every orifice.
The torture is tremendous.
Tis far too much to bare.
My vocal cards make blackened screams.
That mimic those on the horizon.
I see now a figure in the distance.
Its black robe blows in still wind.
It comes closer and closer.
Seemingly floating inches from the ground.
It stops but a few feet in front of me.
My reflection shines in the blade of its scythe.
It stands there a moment almost as if in a silent prayer.
Then it brings its weapon from his shoulder.
I am blinded by a flash of light.
Followed soon by a cutting pain in my neck.
I am looking up at this figure now.
It has no face.
The world goes black.
But Time I cannot judge.
I find myself awake again.
Standing once again in front of blackened ash plains.
A Familiar sound on the horizon.
I cannot help but step to the plains.
It is a compulsion I cannot fight.
This torture is infinite it will not die.
Before my foot hits the soil i take a deep breath and sigh
"Welcome to hell, where you shall forever die."

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  • Freakishbob
    July 4, 2008
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    yeah i need to proof read a little more carfully....im a very impatient person


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 3, 2008
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    very nice take on the prompt there,
    i do ask you though can you capitalize your i's to I's
    it will look much cleaner, =] but i do love this poem,
    its very dark and eerie as well as dark and painful,
    not for the weak hearted eh?
    all my love, keep penning,
    kitty xxx


  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    Wow, superb take on the prompt, love the bleak imagery created by your words. Wonderfully done, good luck in the contest with it