God's light spread across the heavens, embracing man.
Only to find that fornication was love.
Man the master of his universe.
The devil the true ruler of our world.
And greed the seed that binds us.
God then became a heathen.
Raised the Oceans tide with tears.
Spit out storms and fire.
And watched as man became fools and lairs.
And then God's light died.
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- PHOTO PROMPT!!! WHAT DOES JESUS SEE???? by Talking Toni.
550 points, ended July 8, 25 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Enlightening!
I sometimes feel like a greedy devil. Good therapy to read your works of art! KC
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These are desparate words to ponder... And penned with an honest scrutiny, and an eye to our current affairs... In the end the vast majority will be wondering... Lord what have we done...???
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Congrats...
Congrats my friend on ANOTHER well done piece-that is quite a pic to respond to and, as usual, your words are piercingly authentic and surely keeps (well, certainly me, for sure)the reader pondering...love this! All the best...
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Wow what a very creative piece of poetry here.Some very deep images evoked within your words of fear, loss, and pain.The ending really tugs at the heart.
Thanks for sharing your creative talent
Tony
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I agree with Myrataal.
But Bob your among one of the best poets here, well worthy of a throphy
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Excellent Write
Good Morning Bob. I agree God cries everyday when He see what His children do to this planet and to each other. I still believe He is ready to come back with the fire and brimstone soon and start over. That is the only way we will ever get rid of the evil in this world. This was a wonderful and stark take on the picture. Congratulations on the honorable mention. You take care dear friend.
Bless You,
Sandy
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A lot of truth in this Bob.. for the devil is the true ruler of this world at the moment...
A very strong voice here!
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great poem good luck
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Great Write....
thanks for your entry and the best of luck in my contest... -
"And then God's light died!"...An extremely despairing write my friend. God created us and knows our sins and in turn forgives them (or so I believe). Such a powerful write will attract many comments. This poem makes one asess the knowing of one's inner self and the fact that it might be worth more than might be realised...alby
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God's Light may Dim......
but will never die...Yet this is an awesome write Bob...could it be that I am converting you???? Smile....You should enter this in my contest called "What Does Jesus See" Go to my page and scroll down a little to active contest and you'll see it. This goes quite well with my picture prompt and with what I expect from the contestants>>>Just a thought...Loved this side of you nonetheless....Thanks for sharing!!!~~Toni~~
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Wow! Powerful write... I liked it Bob.
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Outstanding
This is full of sadness, God not strong enough to defend the world from the evils in it. I thought this was an interesting poem that tries something new and is successful in what it achieves. Keep up the good work.
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Simple Philosophy
Bob, if you want to know a bit more about me, suggest you look at above mentioned poem, it kinda sums up my conception of "religion"
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Light and dark!
True, there's a lot of "darkness" we put it there each an everyone of us, day by day just like carbon footprints maybe; I like your words, I know where you're coming from, I been in so many churches I lost count, my church is inside me these days; I guess that Truth is whatever you believe it is, whatever you want it to be, I dunno, I'm a searcher, not a preacher, my church is inside me.
Thanks for sharing, I like your courage
H'pye
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This world is in the flimsly grasp of the devil ...
but not for long ... God stays in control. And yes, the "god" of mankind is dead. But the true God can never die ... and He is far above our thoughts.
Thank you for the reminder that man's world is tainted with manmade perceptions.
Very clever way to bring the Truth to the forth.
Blessed be, Poet.
Myra
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To me it was kind of confusing but it is a very strong heart felt poem
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Lol
Ty young lady & yes I to am confused by just about everything.
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this poem is sad to me. a very deep poem. love, prettypoetry
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In my world god is fake but even being a non-believer that was awesome just like the rest of what ya write =)
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oh man dis is ace poem
luv de lines and thoughts
cheers for now
abe
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Perfect! What an amazing summation of the world today!You have written a most wise and intuitive piece here. Fabulous!
Gaylene
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You really ought to get out more, Bob--lol! Joking apart, this is a grim and apocalyptic piece, with a touch of Old Testament fire and brimstone about it.
Take care,
Bill
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Lol
bill you seem to forget that I was born & raised in a part of NYC & worked in the city for 37 years. I get out, maybe to much & I know I have seen many strange things. Enjoy my friend.
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This is an interesting concept. I find religion in most forms quite confusing. I also believe that whatever power controls our planet is about to put us humans in our place. Your poem hints at something akin to that. Well done again. Food for thought.
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awww! That's so sweet. interesting... maybe the devil is the real ruler of this woeld! We seem to do more bad things than good, and yet we know we shouldn't. You summed up what god really wants from us without even saying it directly. WELL DONE!!
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