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Poetic Silence

From words in ancient tongues that time forgot
the poets spun their lines in measured time.
They weaved their vibrant tapestries of thought
with verses trailing free or trimmed to rhyme.

Their cadences engaged the hearts and minds
of those who spoke the language of the day,
but none today can speak or hear their lines:
The winds of time have borne their words away.


Poetic lines could be inscribed in stone,
but if the living never hear them said,
there’s nothing left of them but heartless bone:
Without their breath, a poet’s words are dead.

    Poetic colors that the blind can hear,
    if never heard, grow lifeless, gray and sere.

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  • Jaden silver member
    January 4
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  • Death of the Author
    November 28, 2008

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    Refering to the comment below, I doubt that specifically to me, my poetry will last much longer than 40 years. Especially since most of it is electronic, which has every possibility of (sorry for the crudeness) going tits up at any time. Not to mention the fact that even if it wasn't electronic, it's not memorable.

    Blimey you are good.


  • Suzianne
    July 15, 2008

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    Well said...

    I believe there is some poetry meant for the page and other poetry meant to be spoken and heard. I agree with you..."Without their breath, a poet’s words are dead."


  • WarrioroftheHeart gold member
    July 3, 2008

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    When I looked at this I thought what a sad thing, it is a terrible thing for words to lose their meaning, especially when those words represent the oral history of a civilisation. It is sad to think that it could be a short as 400 years when our own writing is all but incomprehensible to those that come after us.

    Not being able to understand more than my native tongue I can think of many times when I have seen an inscription or piece of verse and wished that I knew what that insciption meant.

    I liked the way the poem flowed when I read this and looking at it I can tell that you structured the sonnet correctly as well. The words, "Without their breath, a poets words are dead" say it all to me and are the high point of the poem.

    Well done and good luck inthe contest,

    Adrian


    • Peripatetic gold member
      July 4, 2008
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      "It is sad to think that it could be a short as 400 years when our own writing is all but incomprehensible to those that come after us."
      I see you have grasped what I hoped to convey. Your acuity is greatly appreciated.

  • ecrivain01
    July 2, 2008

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    This is an excellent poem ...

    with a serious flaw. This line:

    Without their breath, a poet's words are dead.

    Many poets are not "discovered" until after they are dead. To whit, Emily Dickinson, who never read a poem of hers aloud to anyone, and nobody in his right mind would say her words are "heartless bone". In other words, your first and second stanzas and final couplet are very good, and the third stanza is bad.

    I'd recommend revisiting that stanza and fixing it before the contest is over.


    • Peripatetic gold member
      July 2, 2008
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      Without their breath, a poet's words are dead.

      Note the plural pronoun. The line does not refer to a poet, but to a poet's words.

      If a poet's words are never breathed and heard, they are dead. We who read Emily Dickinson can hear her words, just as she could, for she knew and could hear the language. She was an exceptionally private person, but I have never heard that she was deaf or mute. Her poems may be from silent reflection, but they are not silent.

      I can trace the cuneiform and read the translation of an ancient Assyrian love poem, but I cannot hear it or be touched by it as one might have on the day it was written. It is the bare bones of the life it once had.

      The third stanza is the climactic one of this sonnet. I will leave my line as I have written it, for it laments the silent poetry which will never be heard again - and against the day when our own language no longer reverberates in the souls of those who may only translate its etched characters.

      • ecrivain01
        July 2, 2008
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        Yes, I see ...

        what you are getting at. I certainly agree with the sentiment, but I'm still a bit doubtful about the wording. However, I'll take your word for it.


        • Peripatetic gold member
          July 3, 2008
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          Well, thanks for the contest. I enjoy well-written sonnets and villanelles. I am sure there will be a number of fine entries here.


  • BellaD
    July 2, 2008
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    A beautifully written sonnet. Third stanza is my favorite.
    Best of luck in the contest.

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