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Heart Stomped

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heart stomped...

crushed hard

...dirty bastard!

kicked right out the backdoor

into the alleyway of shame


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DON’T BORE THE F**K OUT OF Me!

A contest entry

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  • damn! i love it i think you did a very great job i am truly impressed you took 16 words and did your thang huh nice job

  • adora
    July 3

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    lol. I like the use of short but loaded phrases. It added considerably to the general atmosphere of your poem.

  • Balldinger silver member
    July 2

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    no one craves the carnal wars of the 70's like the little-mouthed animated people. did you know they could never count backwards?


  • secberm
    July 2

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    Curious, sis. Very strong write for 16 words. Glad to see you post again. Missed ya. Hope all is well. Good luck and write on.

    Dez


  • Shya
    July 2

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    Wow... said so much for such a short poem... every line is powerful and filled with emotion. Best of luck in the contest!
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