Snowflake complexion
Porcelain teardrops
Disguises her pain
fake, pageant smile
Never knew true love
Pale, tattooed girl
A gentleman's whore
Body sold for profit
Black is her soul
Blank is her memory
Stolen so long ago
Forced into a prostitute
Dreams of nothing anymore
Holds back tears of rage
Strangers take her dignity
Leave the money by the bed
Author notes
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6.China Doll Face
image credit: photobucket/author unknown
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A contest entry
- 20 Titles and Quotes by Travel Notes.
600 points, ended July 15, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow this is really good too.
my cousin's mom made her go into being a prostitute cuz they were low on money && now shes totally messed up in the head.
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Incredible write
I love the way you have taken the prompt. You totally deserved gold!!
~Jillybean128
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Ohhh gorgeousss! Love the imagery and the way you portrayed this. First stanza was by far my favorite, but they were all lovely. I feel like if you were to expand on this, fill in the missing gaps it would be amazing. Congratulations on the well-deserved trophy!
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I loved your take on the title. Very origional yet it still fit quite nicely together with the rest of the poem. The only thing I might have changed here was give it a bit better ending. It sort of just seemed to stop in mid-thought. Thank you for your lovely words.
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all this is so true. it's a shame that it happens in this world but it does, maybe when people read this poem they will try to change this one way or another. maybe you can stop a girl from selling herself by her reading this poem or a guy not buy it (i know it's a long stretch but it could happen) i'm a firm believer that sometimes when someone reads a poem or hears a long (possibly reads the lyrics) that somehow it changes them (hopefully for the good! lol). i'm sure that your poem will help benefit many women. great work and excellent job!
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It's a shame things like this happen constantly in this world and so many have to suffer this fate. It's strange how twisted this world can be at times. You really brought all that up with this short poem and did it marvelously.
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Yes, the poem is sad, but the picture fits the poem
so well. Good luck in the contest. Love ya
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This is very sad and heartbreaking.
It's too bad that such things do
happen in our world everyday. Great
work with this picture and good luck
to you with it in this contest!
Jeremy0826 -
that's a sad poem I could bring myself to think on life this way be horrid excellent expression and a wonderful poem. Good luck in the contest
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