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Omni...

Ancient in days and ways
I Suspend in pendulum
      swinging paths

Celestial orbs
Peeking from lunar satellite

      to see

Progeney

        Squabble and posture
Mow, and grow with arrogance

                                            Unaware, unconcerned with fibrils
                                                          To the past

Leaping oblivious to the cosmos

The lineage enduring, returning

Always consuming, never tasting

Tending neither the universe within

Without


Frightened of fate; but refusing to face the consequences
                    Of building weak bridges

                  Or, none at all

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  • myrataal silver member
    July 10, 2008

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    Your work is intense ...

    and I love to simply let the words wash over me ...

    The echoes come from within.

    Blessed be, Poet.

    Myra


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    July 8, 2008

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    I read:

    'Omni-'------------------------ Everywhere

    'Ancient in days and ways
    I Suspend in pendulum
          swinging paths' --------- Time

    'Celestial orbs
    Peeking from lunar satellite' -- Like the Lunar Calendar.

          'to see ----------------------- To witness

    Progeney' ----------- progeny, mankind.

            'Squabble and posture
    Mow, and grow with arrogance'

    - Living in short-sighted ignorance...

    'Unaware, unconcerned with fibrils
    To the past'

    - when there are lessons to learn from the past

    'Leaping oblivious to the cosmos
    The lineage enduring, returning
    Always consuming, never tasting'

    -Living as if disconnected and unappreciative of real qualities.

    'Tending neither the universe within'

    -Yes, tending this one is most likely to lead back into more appropriate connectedness and responsibility.

    'Without' ----- or Without


    'Frightened of fate; but refusing to face the consequences
                        Of building weak bridges'
    -So much life spent on pursuing quick fixes

    'Or, none at all' -- Complacency.

    This reads as a view from the consideration of the largeness of 'Everywhere' onto the position of smaller minded man, who is in need of a wake up call.

    Expansive thought and considerate sentiments expressed. Well done!

    And thank you very much for this.

    Sol


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    July 3, 2008
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    Thank you, for a wonderful entry.

    All the best with the judging.
    Will be back soon.

    Sol