Memories of the way I would dance,
with him, the two of us floated on air,
our laughter, our joy.
Every song was our dance back then.
Now he dances in another place,
with angels who know our steps.
He may have left me in soul,
but it does not change how I feel.
When I am walking alone and hear music,
there in front of me,
all around me, he and I dance.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Manda Kathryn.
600 points, ended July 8, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a heartfelt piece you have shared.. congrats on the HM.. A deserving piece..
Cheers
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gosh, this is heartstopping, the creativity here is boundless, and perfect for the pic prompt.
The first two lines just reeled me in, I love how you are able to be creative, yet true to life, you some how never loose your grit, its a real skill is that
nice write my friend
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Excellent
Haven't seem much of your work lately. This is really beautify written and flows really well. Really pulls at the hearts strings. Good luch in the contest.
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ahhh this is a wonderfully lovely write here. haha i didnt know you had it in ya to sing such a tender melody. This write really sent me down memory lane and then to the future when The One will be lost, but only on this world, not in the heart.
great write my friend.
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Touching
It is very sad but beautifully written! It's a beautiful touching story in the form of a great poem!
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Beautifully romantic, this touches the heart softly with the imagery of souls dancing for eternity even after their bodies may leave earth
♥
Thank you & Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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You've given me an idea for a poem of my own, not so good as this though
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Wonderful.....just amazingly beautiful and creative. Well written
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Very nicely penned. An excellent take on the prompt. You tell a beautiful story sad perhaps but then not all life must come to an end ....i am thinking they shared the dance to the end not broke off part way through. Good luck
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Aw, this poem is beautiful and so sad! You did excellent!
best of luck in the contest. -
Wonderful Poem Son.
Hi James, This was such a pleasure to read. Sometimes the older we get all we have left are our sweet memories. Best of luck to you. Take care. Blessings.
Love You,
Mum
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very nice poem, good luck
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very good take on the picture. seems like wonderful memories were made as you can continue to treasure them for a lifetime. good luck in the contest, DARK.
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Bravo! Bravo! Had to go look at the picture, was wondering who this "him" was that you danced with long ago and missed so much... haha!
A wonderful take on the picture, bro!
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