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I love a rainy night

 

 

 

We were sitting on the porch swing

watching steady sheets of rain.

The weather was warm for Spring,

& we had everything to gain.

 

You asked me to dance with you

bare-foot in wet of grass.

Love was still so innocent & new

I simply couldn't pass.

 

So we swayed to the moonlight

& her gentle flow of tears.

I learned to love a rainy night,

& whispers in my ears.

 

For so long we've been together,

dancing to rainy nights.

Still working on dreams of forever,

giving our best fights.

 

We still sit on that old porch swing

at the end of a long day.

Sometimes it is cold for Spring,

but we dance anyway.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Frozentearz gold member
    August 21

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    A wonderful entry into this contest congratulations on your award It was very hard to award the top three in this one, as the three of you did such a top notch job.
    Thanks for joining in.
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz

  • daviscth silver member
    August 21
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    congrats on both your cups for this awesome write.


  • Frogzter gold member
    August 20

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    I loved this one! Perfect rhyme and flow and full of imagery and emotion! Can see why it won gold already!
    THanks for entering and best wishes,

    Frogz~

  • Frozentearz gold member
    August 15
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    Frist of all congratulations on your Gold,
    This was lovely, And makes me want to have one of these dances with the rain a back drop of music.
    Thanks for joining in.
    Warm thoughts.
    Frozentearz

  • Midnight-x-Rose
    July 6

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    This is beautiful. I'm not normally one for really nice love poems, as I feel broken by love but this is so innocent and pure and just beautiful. I really do love it, I would love to have a love like this, I really would. Beautifully wrote.

  • adsaige gold member
    July 3

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    very beautiful. though i tend
    to think that rhyming generally
    takes away the message and the words
    of the poem, i think the rhyming worked
    well enough for this piece.

    some parts could have been rhymed
    better as they were fairly predictable:
    as grass, pass, but that was alright.

    I feel as though this stanza:
    So we swayed to the moonlight
    & her gentle flow of tears.
    I learned to love a rainy night,
    & whispers in my ears.

    could be edited a bit. i like it, but something about

    it compared to the whole piece seems a bit awkward.

    other than that, a beautiful piece.




  • Nicolette gold member
    July 2

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    I think this is the first rhyming poem of yours that I've read - and I like it! It has a lovely lyrical, singing quality about it. Those rainy nights are just the best!!

    ~ Nicolette

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