Stunted wings cannot lift
to brighter skies
Forlornly, I watch freedom
distantly flying
Weathered tree trembles
... echoing my
surrendered spirit
Author notes
Prompt: Pic, 20 words
Please Credit the Artist. place link in AN
http://night-fate.deviantart.com/art/dead-whispers-89883886
A contest entry
- 10/20/30 Quickie by Sensual Angel.
700 points, ended July 2, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful
Such a powerful creation for the contest. Congratulations on the silver.
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Sad angel pomes are a dime a dozen. You have raised the bar and composed something original and beautiful.
Love,
Amera♥
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Thanks! I'm kinda sick of the sad angel writes myself!! lol
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Excellent work. A wonderful take on the picture. You are a gifted writer.
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Such a sad write auntie J! The whole feeling of just giving up, "seeing the glass only half empty". That she may never amount to anything. Congrats on the Silver!
♥
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Dear God, I missed one of your writes by accident. :/
"Stunted wings"
Ahh, love this phrase. Reflects vulnerability in 2 words...crazy.
"freedom distantly flying"
Wonderful...that feeling sucks.
That second stanza is totally awesome--love the despair in it (though I don't wanna feel it)
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congrats on a well deserved and i do mean well deserved if not more silver throphy....... your awesome... have i told you that... hehe..... thanks for sharing this.....! *wishing I was this good*
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Congrats on the silver.
When I saw "Forlornly" I was scared. lol But it goes well with the flow of the line to "flying".
Nice work.
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The picture and image evoke the desire to fly, but to be captured and surrender spirit. This form complements the nature of the poem. Presentation is excellent and matches the target mood.
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Very nice, Jacks. Once again you seem to have conveyed so much that it is hard to believe it is only 20 words. Congrats on the silver!
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Ooh. Wow. Nice. The wording you used built onto quite a somber mood and made me feel sad...alone...broken. Well done, I must say! With so little, you said so much! Loved this!
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congrats on the silver. =] its beautiful. <3
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Wonderful! You have certainly delved into this picture and your imagery in wxcellent. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy
Gaylene
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Congrats on the silver!
Aww this is beautiful yet so sad. I can really relate to this, not nice feeling like your left behind when the rest of the world is taking off. Such a wistful feel to this, with stunning imagery. Wonderfully written, as always
congrats on a much deserved silver 
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Weathered tree trembles
... echoing my
surrendered spirit
Just beautiful...love the imagery throughout..congrats on the silver, well deserved!
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Within few words you did creat a piece both full of image and impact meaning. Excellent piece indeed! Congrats on the silver
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These 20 word poems blow my mind! lol....I dont know how you can manage to say anything in 20 words....throw in depth, imagery, impact...but you do. Quite impressive! Good luck to you in the contest!
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congrats on the silver
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Very good! Loved the opening line of "stunted wings" and how this has affected her... Aww, such a great take! Best of luck
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this is an excellent take on the prompt. I love it.. the imagery that you have used through out this is vivid.. I really enjoyed reading this.. I loved the first line and the last 2 lines.
good luck
kat
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very nicely done, you used all the imagery very well.
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Bravo!! you did such a wonderful job! I really loved this!! and you said that you needed luck.lol.. I doubt that!! you did beautifully sis!! best of luck!!
Angel
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well done Awesome take good Luck
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wow auntie
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Yay sissy!!! You don't need to try..lol.
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HAHAHA, ditto that!!
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and just where are you in this little contest? hmmm? lol. jk
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Trust me.. I do at the moment
lol
Good luck sis!!
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