A newly founded pain,
In my chest,
Stops me from living truly again.
I saw you with her;
Don’t deny it,
Holding hands broke through my border.
I cover up my mournful cries,
but you know me too well;
you know my smiles are lies.
I’ll vision when our love was newfound,
Hopefully never to awake,
From the web of hopes I have wound.
But I blink from this dream,
A regrettable mistake,
As I wake up living, it would seem.
I now lay awake at night,
Wondering what’s wrong with me,
I can’t let go of this; it’s too tight.
How can you know my feelings,
Yet trample on them,
Not caring about me; my yearnings.
God, please let it go,
I don’t wish to live this pain,
This shame that’s so aglow.
I can’t take this any longer, this pain,
So I’ll carve your name,
In my vein.
As I bleed to death all alone,
I hope you regret the mistake you made,
In leaving me to be with someone prettier is shown.
Author notes
Contest Eating Disorders and Depression: Depression
A contest entry
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Comments
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I like the rhyme. Its nice to have a change.
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ya... I just find it kinda annoying having to rhyme... lol I'm just too lazy, really.
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The link to depression wasn't extremely strong. I could see she was sad but it seemed to be more lost love than a poem concerning depression. Anyway, it was an interesting write. The last bit sounded a tad cliche but that was about it. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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it's really good!! Everything is good besides the very last part! it doesn't rhme but its really good! keep it up!!
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