“Humanity, at its finest”
What a
puzzling thing
Humanity is
We cry
when twin towers
symbolic
of
S a
L n
A d
V G
E R
R ee
Y D
tumble
to
the
earth
taking innocent lives
with them
Yet,
we applaud
every time Texas turns on
its electric chair
and even harder we clap
if its a retard
or
nigger
all of us
wishing
and
wondering
'why don’t they
bring back the
noose
?'
So we pray
to a GOD
who speaks
homophobia
Walks
misogyny
drinks
hate
spits
jealousy
and
breaths
genocide
Humanity begins
to make
A bit more sense
if we accept
, as the book says,
(make sure you have the right addition of the right book printed in the right year on the right paper with the right ink and bound in the right leather that has been blessed by the right person, or you will forever burn in hell for being ignorant)
we are
made in
HIS
image
and we see humanity
for what it is
Glorified
Hypocrisy
At its
Finest
Author notes
I probably want to change the title, It was just something I used as a place holder.
This doesnt work as well as I would like to because I cant use the rich text editor, and this in the printed version takes advantage of different fonts, sizes, bolding, underlining, ect. Which did serve a purpose...
I think the point gets across though
A contest entry
- Anti-American Poetry PW by grobbie.
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Comments
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Fucking. Love it.
Nuff said.
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it gets across and packs a mean punch... i love it... i also share in your thoughts... and i wish for change but who has time for a revolution these days???... great write as usual...
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Damn impressive poem you have here. The layout itself was very creative. I believe the christian bible itself does tell about some good values in life,but most people these days tend to use religion for control sadly..
"We cry
when twin towers
symbolic
of
S a
L n
A d
V G
E R
R ee
Y D
tumble
to
the
earth
taking innocent lives
with them"
^^^ Great layout and words here.
Awesome job overall
keep on writin!
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AMEN to that! it's a good feeling to see other humans writing such sense. maybe there is hope for the world with people like you out there. keep fighting it brother. -Jamie
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very good contrast you paint between how some loss of life is mourned while other times it's celebrated or glorified.
i've always found it somewhat ironic (and saddening) the number of civilians killed in afghanistan and iraq and likely tortured in guatamo bay compared to the roughly 300 killed in the september 11th attacks.
certainly we are capable of a great deal of contradiction and hypocrisy. we are also capable of incredible amounts of kindness and selflessness, but unfortunately it seems like the former tends to dominate the farther removed from the individual person-to-person level we go. (unfortunately, at the same time the scope of the impact grows greater and greater).
you paint with a rather broad brush here, but underneath the brash, extreme language here you touch on several persistent issues we usually try to skim over (such as disparate treatment of blacks by law enforcement and the criminal justice system, particularly regarding death sentences, and the larger trend of valuing some lives over others).
as far as the poem itself, creative layout, quite effective at points, like how form follows sense, though to be honest in execution it doe seem a bit awkward visually/aesthetically. particularly with the twin towers i think maybe you'd be better with one slightly shorter or longer rather than the two letters jutting out. maybe you could use "&" instead of "and" and than spaceholders (spaces, more "&"s, or another symbol if you wanted to maintain the same height).
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Oh, I think your confusing God w/ people... I applaud your creativity and your right to speak freely and write freely, Thank God for our ammendments! LOL. I really do like this!! Especially the part about 'The Book'! Always there to justify...( if u would be so kind as to read my poem "Stones") But the part about slavery and greed and the twin towers, that kind of threw me off a bit. Those towers held brilliant professional people who worked hard, working hard and getting a great income because of it, is not slavery and or greed. Tragic, gut wrenching day, I remember it like yesterday. And yes, people can be rotten greedy mother f'ers. But the rest of your poem I LOVED!
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You get no flak from me! I agree with everything you said (which is rare for me!) Bravo poet... BRAVO!
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Well
It is pessimistic; we all have our faults and you are right to say that some do glorify in their sins, faults, biases, etc. I think of it this way: there are two views on life, OK - love and hate. You look at the world one way, and everything's fine if not sparkling around you, or all you see is the negativity. But I sense your message stems from something deeper, that is prompting you to write this poem in the first place. Well, better out than in. Best write it than let it boil over and do more damage to yourself and others. But as a poem, it's very good.
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AMAZING
WOW. This is absolutly FABULOUS. The form is AMAZING, something I could never pull off. I love the way you poke holes in all that we believe in, and you do it so amazingly.
"(make sure you have the right addition of the right book printed in the right year on the right paper with the right ink and bound in the right leather that has been blessed by the right person, or you will forever burn in hell for being ignorant)."
PERFECT. I can see how the rich text editor would help, but it's still very good as it is.
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