Prim and proper turned up nose,
turn their backs on society's woes.
Can not see the forest for the trees,
always told, "do what you please"
Turns a blind eye, only sees greed,
no hands to help others succeed.
Wear their finery, king of the hill,
cackling voices all sounding shrill.
No help thy neighbor, in their vocab,
no sympathy for those lost in rehab.
Can not imagine their never giving,
while some barely eke out a living.
Gap between the rich and the poor,
has become something I truly abhor.
Many at times need a helping hand,
so on their own they are can stand.
I know a book we all should follow,
words of truth never ring hollow.
Ten Commandments, ten simple rules,
to be disregarded only by fools.
Open up your hearts, do unto others,
God's children, sisters and brothers.
With time and money give of yourself,
share their burdens, share your wealth.
A contest entry
- Sparrow Song by Shya.
800 points, ends August 27, 47 entries
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Comments
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Quatrain and rhyme flows well. I think this is clear and concise. I think this follows the intent and commitment of the contest. Great reminders of how God truly keeps life to follow the golden rules and laws. God's children share their burdens and tenderness to each other.
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Miss Sandy, this is so sweet - to the ears and to the soul -
We could simplify by following "The Two"
Love God with all you've got and love your neighbor like you love yourself
I really enjoyed this piece
Blessings on you today
Wade
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Amazing write and no truer words were spoken
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Good Morning James
It was so nice to hear from you. Thank you for the nice comment. So glad to hear things are going well for you. You take care.
Bless You,
Mum
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Though I destest churches and all they stand for and the corruption that is rife within them I truly liked this poem. It basically comes down to ethics which this poem is a shining example of. It comes from within and can only be taught to a degree, the rest is upto us. The rhyme and flow are very good and the message is strong and most worthy. Great write
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Great Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. I appreciate the very nice comment. You take care. Sandy
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Lovely, richly powerful and real, I would love to hear this sung one day like a hymmn I think would sound so beautiful.
Lovely!
Best of luck hun
♥
Stay safe
Love to you
~Manda
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Thank You!!!!
Wonderful comment sweet Amanda. I never thought of it being sung as a song but you are right. I could hear it now played with a guitar. Hope your day goes well. You take care.
blessings to You,
Sandy
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I loved the last stanza so much! The message that this poem conveys is so true... good job. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Thank you for the nice comment. Take care.
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i like the way this was writeen grammy
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Good Morning Emmy
Thank you sweet granddaughter for this wonderful comment. Always brings grammy a smile when you pop in. You have a beautiful day. Take care.
Bless You,
Grammy
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Bravo!
One of your best poems, Sandy. Great message on how we should help others in a time of need. Fine work.
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Good Morning My Friend
Hi Jaime, your comment was so nice and appreciated. Thank you for reading. You take care. Smiles for you!!! Sandy
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This is a fabulously written piece of poetry. I loved the meaning of it. So beautiful and stunning. The only thing I reccommend is making the poem a little bit more readable. A dark color, one that's not so hard on the eyes. Otherwise, this poem was AMAZING. Best of luck to you ♥
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Great Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading. Your comment is wonderful and most appreciated. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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