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My Georgia Peach (ONE) (Harrisham Sonnet)

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My Georgia Peach (ONE)        (Harrisham Sonnet)

♥

Sweet as the flesh, during loves cataclysm,

tender as a ripe, sweet Georgia peach of sin.

Reserved for me, her many faces, as facets of a prism,

deceptively hiding, her true self within.

Yet, giving signs of a way to her voluptuous bosom,

teasing and flirting giving hope, she may give in.

♥

Mysterious as the heavens and the worlds they hold,

sensuous with every word we share,

sharing her desires, a wonder to behold.

Giving way to the lust of those who dare,

grasp each moment of rapture, as nevermore so bold,

possessing each other, in ways beyond compare.

♥

This my love, my wondrous desires of you,

sanity eludes me, as I must bid you, adieu.

 

 

Author notes

By ~ Maxboy ~~ Harrisham Sonnet
Image By ~ photobucket
Background ~ My Sweet Georgia Peach ~ By ~ Riftkin

"We loved with a love that was more than love."~ Edgar Allan Poe

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  • Little Feather Greeters member
    September 20
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    This one

    needs adjusting

  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 15

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    Nice! Now this is a sonnet that is well written and truly speaks truth of a woman...the flow is great and the imagery wonderful...
    such a lovely write...
    Love,
    mystic


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 15
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      Thank you for the applause and wonderful comment.

      Love
      Don

  • JinSays gold member
    September 14
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    beautiful. She is too. i see why you're so taken with her. Best wishes in this contest, jin


    • Maxboy gold member
      September 14
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      Thank you for the applause and the wonderful comment.

      Don

  • unavailable
    September 10

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    I liked this a lot, very well written



    • Maxboy gold member
      September 19
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      Thank you so much for the Honorable Mention, I am pleased you liked my poem.

      Thanks Again
      Don

    • Maxboy gold member
      September 10
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      Thank you for the very nice comment.

      Don

  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 27

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    This is a very lovelypiece, the sentiments it holds are unique and something any woman would crave for. I will takeit that this has won bronze even though it does not show here on this page. Well done best to you

    • Maxboy gold member
      August 28
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment.

      Early on, I didn't save the contests, but made note of the wins in the Author's Notes.

      Thanks Again
      Don

  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 26

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    This has a very good flow to it, some gorgeous visuals portrayed. Excellent write, thanks for entering and good luck

    • Maxboy gold member
      August 26
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      Thank you so much for wondeful comment.

      Don
  • eightball666
    August 21

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    Very good sonnet my friend. I look forward to reading the other two. Good job and good luck.


  • Piccola gold member
    August 12

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    Looks easier than other sonnets I've tried. great rhyme and flow. The soft sensuality is great. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for entering.
  • Poemdancer
    August 9
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    Excellent rhyming and great flow. Good job thanks for entering my contest.

  • Poetryintheblood
    August 4

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    Thank you for your beautiful submittal, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 29

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    1)

    She's BLOODY GORGEOUS. -drools-
    ^.^ Hehe. Second of all. This is just as beautiful and truly speaks of love for sure. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.

    • Maxboy gold member
      July 29
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      Thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I am happy you enjoyed my poem.

  • BluesMan gold member
    July 25
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    I am just getting into Sonnets and have olny written one to date so I'm not realy qualified to comment But still I liked the flow and the imagery of the piece


    • Maxboy gold member
      July 26
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      Thanks, I'm just getting into them also. This Harrisham type of sonnet is different from the others, but I like working with it the best.
      Thanks for the applause and comment.

  • Weetzie bat
    July 25
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    I love sonnets. lovely read. Thanks for entering

  • sensualbutterfly
    July 22
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    Very nice...The flow was very smooth. The title caught my attention. Thank you for your entry

    • Maxboy gold member
      July 22
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      Thank you very much for the comment, I'm happy you liked it.

  • Lowercase Prelude gold member
    July 21
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    magnificent read. this was lovely

    • Maxboy gold member
      July 21
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      Thank you very much for the wonderful comment.

  • whos my humblepie
    July 19
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    this was a pleasant read. Thank you for sharing.


  • x meerz
    July 10
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    nicely written

    thanks for entering and good luck>3

  • PodoPaloma
    July 8

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    I really like the photo. It was a nice touch and you could see the beauty.

    You swept me away with your words.
    I liked how the ending rhymed so nicely.
    "This my love, my wondrous desires of you,
    sanity eludes me, as I must bid you, adieu."
    - definitely my favorite part!

    The third stanza is AMAZING. Never have I ever read something that sounded so nice.

    "Mysterious as the heavens and the worlds they hold,
    sensuous with every word we share,
    sharing her desires, a wonder to behold.
    Giving way to the lust of those who dare,
    grasp each moment of rapture, as nevermore so bold,
    possessing each other, in ways beyond compare."

    I like the punctuation you put into there.
    I hate it when there's so many great things about a poem, but there's no punctuation so it can't guide the reader when to slow down reading it. It just doesn't get the flow as nice as it could be.
    I'm not sure if what i'm talking about is making sense, but...it makes sense to me

    Thank you for such a lovely entry.
    You did great works with this one!

    Sincerely,
    dovey ~



    • Maxboy gold member
      July 9
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      Thank you so much, I felt this one was far and away, the best I had done. I too find it difficult to read when you don't know the pace. Sometimes I have to read one several times to get it and that takes away from the poem. I am very happy you enjoyed it. I plan on making it a series, since I enjoyed writing it so much.
      Thank You Again

  • Still single
    July 7
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    Thanks for entering, and especially for writing in metrical rhyme, which i enjoy a lot.

  • MissMarie
    July 6

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    I like the word choice in this poem, the beginning is a little rough witht he flow but overall it was a great write! Nice job and good luck!

  • RoseDaughter
    July 4
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    Thanks for entering

    a very good entry. I love the way this poem is written, great imagery.. Thanks for entering!

    • Maxboy gold member
      July 4
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      WOW!!! That was a fast contest. Thank you very much for the Bronze trophy. I really do appreciate it, but why so short and fast? I am grateful, but do not understand.

  • magikal fairy poet silver member
    July 4

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    O.M.G...you did a poem about me...lol...my name is Georgia so i know you didn't do it for me but the thought of this is very, very funny...lol
    i'm sure that you understand because it's just a saying.

    anyway, this is a great poem...nicely done!!! and great background


    georgiasparkles


    • Maxboy gold member
      July 4
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      You must be right!!!HaHa How did I know I was going to meet a nice young lady named Georgiasparkles on the very day of our 4th of July Independence Day? A day we have a lot of sparklers and fireworks. I am sure you sparkle just as bright. Thank you for the applause and your very nice comment.
      G'day Mate

  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 1

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    You have expressed your fondness for your 'Georgia peach' very well.
    Nice use of words.
    This is beautifully written.
    You have applied the rules of Harrisham Sonnet very well, except for a small point, that 'bloom' does not rhyme with 'prism' and 'bosom'. You may rectify it.

    Thanks for your entry.

    Harrisham Minhas


    • Maxboy gold member
      July 1
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      Thank you for the applause and the pointer, I am greatful for the assistance.
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