You're my ecstasy;
Too bad you're a fantasy.
What's reality?
Does it flow well? Could you feel the emotion?
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I think many of us have an ideal of the person with whom we would like to be. This poem considers this aspect of our humanity very well.
I kinda like your last line. It could be an honest question, but in the context it seems rhetorical or even satirical. (How can reality possibly compare to my ecstatic fantasy!?)
Note: Have you seen discussions of Senryu vs. Haiku? They are the same structurally, but Haiku is considered more relevant to nature itself, while Senryu speaks to human nature. Some people say this is nitpicking (including Basho, the greatest Haiku master of all). I only mention it so you may prepare for when the nitpickers attack - and they will attack!
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Thank you very much! I did not know the difference between Senryu and Haiku, so thank you for warning me.
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I love it and I think it is very easy to relate to
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i have these dreams alot about this one woman, every time i try to remember her face or anything but that she was there i forget faster, this poem kind of makes me think of that, keep it flowing
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