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Condition of the heart

Pretty pink dressed girl with pigtails
Smiles crystal clear like ice
Picking petals off of perfect flowers
Near to a boy where sugar tastes so sweet and he is full of spice.

Sitting in her garden singing
Gentle voice with glistening eyes
Brushing her beautiful soft brunnette locks
Near to the boy who is licking his lips and straightening his tie

Her daddy wouldnt ever know
Her mummy wouldnt ever see
Her family left her years ago
So what worth could her innocence be?

And the little girl just promises to herself,
He'll change.

Rose red lips now stained sourly
Cheeks cut and painted blue
Sat against her bathroom door safely locked
Safe from the boy that beats out her laughter and burns out the hard truth

Her daddy wouldnt ever know
Her mummy wouldnt ever see
Her family left her years ago
So what worth could her innocence be?

And the little girl just promises to herself,
He'll change.

When crossing the dangerous road
The girl sees her sweet speeding end
Her mind, her body, her heart all perfectly stop
Thanks to the girls sweet toothed, straight tied, bitter, hard to escape boyfriend

And the little girl just promised to herself,
He'll change.

Her daddy hadnt ever known
Her mummy just refused to see
Her family distanced years ago
So would worth could her innocence have been?

Author notes

Option 1

Its about a love that is so blind, and domestic violence. Its couples love, and parental love addressed in the poem.

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  • Sheli gold member
    October 4, 2009

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    wow, rather spechless here, you have a gift for emersing the reader in the raw irony of life fueled by a hopelessness so vividly detailed here in yet another brilliant write


  • John Timothy Bailer
    July 1, 2008

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    Hello! I like this analogy, Smiles crystal clear like ice. great write, keep up the great work. Tim aka Childofthenigh

  • Zannah
    July 1, 2008
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    yea great write. This is close to many hearts. violence is hard to live with..


  • Sle3p
    July 1, 2008
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    great

    this is awesome, great work