Spilling the words over the waterfall
gently sleeping in the wind
bubbles floating in dreamland
Our hands have turned to wings now
hovering over as we watch our yesterdays;
descendants thousands of revolutions later
browsing through our hearts
See a shining love triangle
Throwing out the puzzle
connecting the pieces as it may
and they see the connections
as they overlap the poetic aspirations
Like finding an ancient bone
trying to piece together the past
For a fleeting moment
one descendent
reads the words
and an ancient flutter touches her heart
from the words;
As we gently smile
Absorbed in the love;
we became
guardian angels.
Author notes
mjlovestheatlantic-maryjo
A contest entry
- At the end of the day.... by SomethingPoetic.
470 points, ended July 10, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What you think?
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What a great job you did on this one! I love it! Some of the lines in this give such comfort to a troubled heart that it just washes over it, and relaxes it beyond words!
Congrats on the Honorable Win!
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this is very pretty, i love it
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VERY SWEET!!! This is a well written piece!!! Your words flow so lovely and perfectly!! I like every stanza!! My favorite is the first one!! Spilling the words over the waterfall gently sleeping in the wind bubbles floating in dreamland Our hands have turned to wings now hovering over now as we watch our yesterdays; This is just beautiful!!! I LOVE IT!!! ♥♥♥♥
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I think this is immaculate. I like it. It is very smooth, like you would say, smooth as syrup from the tap. Yeah, it is very pretty. keep up the great work and thank you for sharing
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oh so pretty.
when i think of the word "pretty" i will think of this. it's so clean and fresh to me... so wonderfully done
very nice voice.
thank you so much for your lovely entry.
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I like this one very much. It is like the answer to what becomes of us after we die. Our reason for living period.
Thank you for sharing your words.
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This is sweet and tender, so very genuine in a way that most love-poems nowadays are not. That last line just brought the whole thing together so nicely! Well done, and good luck!
Laura x
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wow what a beautiful poem I can relate to your lovely words and found them beautiful to read
Spilling the words over the waterfall gently sleeping in the wind bubbles floating in dreamland Our hands have turned to wings now As we gently smile Absorbed in the love;we became guardian angels.congratulations on your honor
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Again, I think this would read more fluently with the addition of some punctuation.
I liked the part about "descendants thousands of revolutions later / browsing through our hearts..." I just thought it was a neat idea. Thanks for the entry!
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Beautiful entry! Thank you so much, I love the first stanza, it starts the poem off wonderfully!!
Very well written!!!
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lOVELY:
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very sad
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Thank you for your entry
an inspiring write
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This is such a beautiful poem...your are really talented u know...this is absolutely beautiful!!! keep it up!
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