Insistent innertia besotted with gapes of boredom
bestows beauty missed through lids closing;
gravity pulls at thoughts plowing
through thickness of clouds,
stirring up sighs and idleness of mind.
Sluggish words appear as bubbles
floating in mindless deliberation -
each thought leads to procrastination:
the effectiveness of vivid notions
remain blind to soft whispers of greatness
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Indolence leads to stagnation of civilization
Author notes
Sloath http://www.deviantart.com/print/980338/
I chose Sloth as it is rather difficult to put the warning lable on it ~wink~
Procrastination should be avoided at all costs - there is no time like the present to achieve greatness ~smile~
A contest entry
- The Seven Deadly Sins Contest by Ethereal One.
600 points, ended July 4, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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what a very descriptive and overly done way of describing boredom aka sloth. Sounds like someone was bored when the wrote this
lol very nice interpretation of this 'deadly' sin. last time i checked, sloth was an animal, it might could kill you, no one knows, no had the patient to wait and see. Even a legless man got away...ok im rambling again, awesome piece, good luck!
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Very creative write providing the reader with many powerful images, and thoughts about the dangers of being lazy and idle of mind.
Thank you for your entry, and good luck in the contest!
Ethereal One
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A wonderful write
Ths was wonderfully written and paints such a perfect picture. i loved it!
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