I feel happy when the wind is
in my hair
When the trees whisper
with there braches swaying
With the flowers sweet scent
making it even better
The birds singing
beautifully
Chirping along
The grass swaying with the
Song
nature is so lovely
I adore it so much
Even the soaking rain
to the dew drops on the bushes
Author notes
im 11, i'll be 12 in august!
In a list
A contest entry
- What makes you smile? by silverscent.
525 points, ended July 18, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Woah!
This is beautiful. I can visualize it in my mind!
With the flowers sweet scent
making it even better
Lot's of imagery and creativity blossoming out of these lines. Great job!
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wow this is very beautiful, I could picture everything you are talking about in this poem. keep up the great work and keep sharing,you really have a gift.
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Keep writing & congrats on your trophy. You're good for your age!
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sweet, good job!
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This is really sweet and you did a fine job with this piece thank you for sharing your talent and congratulations on your trophy win much love
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This poem has a wonderful flow and feeling. One small detail, you have branches misspelled. Congrats on your honorable mention.
♥
whisper
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fab. :]
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wow great poem keep it up
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awesome
That was a gorgeous poem from someone so young..A true testament to the visual language that resonates with the mind of a child. -
This made me smile!
11 years old and all this come from
a child?
WONDERFUL!
I'm glad these things make you happy.
For this poem made me happy just knowing
That poetry could make an 11 year old happy.
Keep it up, for you have talent my young friend.
-Mandi
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this was fun to read. enjoy your happiness while it lasts because life is going to start sucking real soon...
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Quiet talented you are!
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i am happy to see you smile on all these things..life will be also lovely for you ...
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Just reading this put a smile on my face. The writing was very concise, distilled down to the very essence of what makes you happy, and it's things that make me happy too. If only I had the talent you have when I was your age.. Please continue to write and never stop!!
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Great job, those things make me happy too and just reading this made me happy. Thank you
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The beauty of this is in the detail, this is a delightful poem! Congratulations on your trophy. sj
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What a great job for one soooo young! This is incredible! Now if others could notice the little things and find the happiness in them than all would be great!
Congrats on the Honorable Win.
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Truly amazing write congratulations
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I think this is simply amazing for your age. The imagery and refreshing descriptions are lovely to read. Thanks for entering.
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This was nice and made ME smile.ya know what else makes me smile?Kt being away for like SIX DAYS!!!!That and this......
LOL!
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Cool poem :)
Nice job, this is a neat one. Just be careful of a few little details - 4th line "their", apostrophe in flowers, etc. Overall though, love it! You can really imagine being right there, seeing all of this. Way to go!!
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Happy upcoming Birthday
I like your poem, it's cheerful and celebrates nature and summer. Great work!
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cute
Very nice
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